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Known for being the fastest man-ed jet in the world today. Reaches speeds up to Mach 3.3 (2,200+ mph ). The highest altitude recorded was 85,069 ft and the only man-ed aircraft able to reach that altitude. The jet, is retired with a few left, yet Chaos was able to get his servos onto one~
Weapons: He has a blaster mounted on his back, multiple exploding throwing stars contained on the inside of his wrist. His jet engines from the Sr-71 are also used as a weapon; they flip upside down and mount on his shoulders. When fired, it’s almost a sonic blast of sound to blow his opponents only backwards and away from him (not much of injure). His newest weapon is a long, energon sword.
Height: 25ft/ 7.62m
Quote: "Keep a smile on your face and then you'll everything will be alright."
Tech Skill: 6
For being abandoned when sparked and growing up alone, Chaos has a similar personality like that of Jazz, though not much into pranking unless it makes the other laugh and smile along with them. He likes cheering others up and helping everyone when their down or are in need of help. He doesn’t hesitate in helping out a friend when they seem to need it the most. He's always there when someone is upset or needs a little cheering up; always a smile on his face. He enjoys being around his friends he calls is family and have fun. He is serious about follows orders and does them without question out in the battle field; one along with so many others that wants this war to end. Tired of fighting this war and losing close friends along with it.
Because of his pure black frame, he is able to blind in the shadows and sneak up on his opponents. He has the ability to clone himself with a hologram to confuse his enemies for just enough time to get out of their view and come up behind them. He also has a way with words, often convincing others that what they are doing is wrong or cheering them up.
His wings are very sensitivity, a scare on his chest when hit or punched, causes him an excruciating amount of pain, often causing him not being able to breath.
Chaos flew through high above the ground, his slick black frame grew hidden from view from the ones down below as it blended in with the night sky above. Though every so often a shimmer of light came from his frames reflection from the lights down below.
He was heading off to the Decepticon city Kaon, one of the most dangerous places for an Autobot like himself. He was slightly worried about what would happen when they offered him to fly over the city and see what kind of plans the Dececpticons where making. Chaos vented a harsh sigh as he entered above the city, trying to keep out of view from any Decepticon seekers or grounders who happened to look up at the sky and see his form flying overhead.
Chaos quickly dived out of the sky and landed down on the ground as silently as he could before he ducked down behind a dumpster in an alley. “Primus, what am I getting myself into.” He muttered quietly to himself. He peeked out to see if anyone was around before sprinting off to hid behind another object as he grew closer to his targeting area they said most of Megatrons top warriors where staying.
Chaos had soon gotten close enough to hear what they where talking about and started to record as instructed. Looking around to make sure no one saw him. Yet, didn’t notice the few Decepticons coming up from behind.
“Hey You! What are you doing here?!” One growled in anger.
“Ah scrap….” He muttered quietly before he quickly dashed to get away, only to be caught and thrown backwards as another grabbed his wings.
He cried in agony as pain shot through his sensitive wings. He landed on the ground with a thud before he groaned and started to get yup quickly before they could shook. He brough out his blaster and started shooting back at the Con’s, though that was a big mistake. Soon Con’s knew what was going on and came to aid their comrades into killing or capturing the Autobot intruder.
Chaos quickly knew that he was outnumber and was about to fly off before a blast came from behind. He cried out before collapsing to the ground. Blacking out for a moment before looking around again, only to find a pile of Con’s on top of him. Holding him down to keep him from escaping. Fear flew into his optics as he began to panic, wondering what they had planned for the spy.
“Well, well. I wonder what Megatron will have planned for you~”
“Hopefully something painful.” One laughed darkly
Chaos remained silent as he remained on the ground. They soon pulled him to his pedes and pulled him off to the brig. Wondering, and hoping his fellow Autobots will come and rescue him from his dreadful nightmare
//Alright, i added, deleted and Edited everything that needed to be fixed. I read over all the rules and looked over the sample post of what this is supposed to look like. If i missed anything please let me know.
You did change some things, but the application, as it stands, is still not acceptable.
We don't need a huge description of, or a link to, what his alt mode looks like. Most people know. That means the paragraph is extra reading that's unnecessary. The weapons...that section does not require a paragraph describing them either. The weapons section should be a simple listing what he carries in, both, alt mode and robot form.
You failed to list the special ability...cloning...which would cost a considerable penalty in stats points.
His height, too short for such a large aircraft.
The profile gives me nothing but the fact that he likes to make people feel good and perks them up when they're down. Abilities is where the description of his weapons go. His weaknesses...nothing is mentioned in his profile as to how he received such a detrimental injury to his chest that would make him so vulnerable and why it was never repaired.
There at multiple spelling and grammar errors throughout the entire application.
I would suggest you seriously consider taking on a canon character to start off with and once you get the hang of them then you could try again. As it stands this application is denied.