Rodimus Prime wrote:Arcee
Allegiance: Autobot
Function: Scout/Sniper/Recon
Alt. mode: Motorcycle
Weapons: Laser pistol, sniper rifle, dagger
Height: 16 ft / 4.86 m
Quote: “Precision is a deadly weapon."
Strength: 4
Intelligence: 7
Dexterity: 6
Speed: 7
Endurance: 5
Courage: 8
Firepower: 7
Accuracy: 9
Melee: 3
Tech Skill: 5
Profile: Arcee would rather go exploring on an alien planet then be involved in the ages-old conflict between the Autobots and Decepticons. For her, scouting and discovery are exhilarating, and serve a much better purpose than destruction. Having said that, her enthusiasm for finding new things translates well into her job in the Autobot army: to go out and find where the enemy is and what it is up to, undetected. She is very good at reconnaissance and long distance warfare. She abhors Decepticons and what they stand for, and has no problem taking them out without them ever suspecting it. Some may consider snipers cowards for not fighting face to face, but when it comes to Arcee, taking out the trash is the end that justifies any means. She does get frustrated at times at her inability to take punishment in a fight, because she knows her small stature makes her a liability in combat. This often results in an unexpected rage, at which time any bot in her vicinity would do well to be somewhere else. Anywhere else.
Abilities: Arcee is equipped with the best sniper rifle Autobot military has ever come up with. She has nearly unlimited range, her only obstacles being the type of ammunition she uses and the terrain she is in. Her calm demeanor and quiet personality add up to steady hands that wouldn't shake during an earthquake if it meant keeping her sights on a soon-to-be-dead Con. In motorcycle mode she is capable of high speeds rivaled only by Blurr and some of the Decepticon Seekers. Her small body also allows her to fit into spaces where others - Autobot or Decepticon - can't go. In robot mode she packs a laser pistol in addition to her sniper rifle, but she rarely uses it, same with her dagger. They only come out when she is threatened in close-quarters combat, and she uses them long enough to make a getaway. Her near-uncontrollable rage also serves her at times, especially when she cannot deal with an enemy or obstacle with just her strength and bare hands. Though far from Banner-going-Hulk, the rage does boost her fighting ability temporarily.
Weaknesses: Arcee's small size is her biggest weakness. Even though it does make her a smaller target, and helps her in escape situations, if she ever gets caught in a battle, she is almost certain to lose a fight, whether it be hand-to-hand combat or small arms battle. Though her sniper rifle makes her a near-invaluable asset, it being nearly as long as her entire body makes it somewhat awkward to carry on her back when she's not using it. Its extremely long range also comes from her being able to propel the ammunition she uses at very high speed, for which she uses her own energon supply. If she gets into a firefight using the rifle, it can drain her energy at a rapid rate. Her rage can also get her in trouble, due to not being able to control it and not thinking clearly when she gets pissed off. This usually results in her having to be bailed out of a bad situation by her fellow Autobots.
Sample Post
Earth; Canada. Rocky Mountains
Arcee walked through the forest as quiet as she could. Her job here was to gather information on the Decepticons' activities. What could they be doing here? There are no ready resources for them to use. No clear areas for their shuttles and troop carriers to use. Yet a large squad of Decepticons has been reported in these woods and Autobot high command wanted to know why. And as usual, they came to her. After all, she was the best in the business.
"Where are they?" Arcee said to herself. "I'm tired of looking."
She was getting upset by the minute, and she knew she shouldn't. It made for a less effective scouting mission. She might miss crucial details. She came to a clearing and noticed a road leading away from it.
"Finally." she muttered and transformed.
Her newly acquired bike mode would help her traverse this area much faster, given the road keeps going. She took off, pushing her engine to its limits, reaching speeds thought impossible by humans. As she blew around a curve, she locked up her brakes in reaction to the sight in front of her, but it was too late. She slammed into the dirt wall that was somehow erected right on the road.
"Damn it!" she cursed as she transformed back to robot mode, shaking off the dirt that tumbled down on top of her after slamming into the wall.
She stood up and looked up at the top of the wall.
"Of course it's gonna be a wall!" she said, her temper rising. "Why would anything go according to plan?!"
With that, she began scaling the wall, her rage kept in check by the anticipation that whatever - or whoever - put up this wall was right on the other side. As she was about halfway up, the wall next to her head exploded, chucks flying out.
"What the---?" she asked, as another small explosion put a hole in the wall on the other side of her head.
Confused, she didn't know what to do. The decision was made for her, when a sniper's round slammed into her right shoulder, shooting pain down her arm and releasing her grip on the wall.
"AAAHHH!!!" she screamed as she half slid/half fell down the wall, her right side in terrible pain.
Luckily for her, her sniper rifle was hanging off her left shoulder, and when she landed on the ground she immediately brought it around onto her shoulder, the scope attaching itself to her left optic. She immediately began firing in the vicinity of her attacker, but she was getting nowhere, as the enemy sniper managed to hit the ground in front of her, and hit her in the chest, knocking her back. He must not be using high-impact rounds, as the bullets didn't do much damage, mostly cosmetic. The round in her shoulder must have hit a seam in her armor, as it tore into her shoulder and caused a lot of pain. In turn, the pain made her angry, and she couldn't focus. All she knew was she had to take this unseen enemy out.
"Come on, scrapheap!" she growled. "Show me your face!"
She couldn't find her target through the scope, and realized she had to calm down. If she focused, she would locate the other shooter. No one was better at this than her. No one. Finally she spotted him. He was taking aim at her. It was a generic Decepticon, which would explain the low-yield rounds. It was just a guard protecting the wall, not some high ranking Decepticon. Which meant reinforcements were on the way. This had to be done fast. Amid unsteady fire from the guard, Arcee took careful aim and shot the hapless Decepticon right through the sniper scope and his optic. The back of his head exploded and he dropped his rifle, falling backwards, dead as Shockwave's emotion circuits.
Arcee heard the commotion made by the other guards on the other side of the wall, and deactivated her rifle, which slung back over her shoulder as she transformed into bike mode. As the 1st guard scrambled over the wall and prepared to take aim at her, she tore down the road back the way she came. She knew this has to be reported immediately. If the Decepticons guard this area this seriously, it must be important for something.
Okay, this app is very well written and if Arcee was not an already established character in the game I would have no problem approving it. Unfortunately, there’s already a pre-approved profile for Arcee that’s very different from what you have written, and she’s been played based off of that original profile by several players in the game thus far. It’s not that new players can’t put their own stamp on a character, even one that has already been played, just as long as the changes are not substantial or conflict with what is already established for said character. Your profile, while again well done, changes a bit too much of her character than how she’s already been portrayed in game for a while now.
For instance, you have different stats, height, function and weapons, all of which also affects the Profile, Abilities and Weaknesses sections at the bottom. There are also certain personality aspects that conflict with her previous portrayal.
For the stats, you've lowered her strength and dexterity by 2 and her melee from 9 all the way down to 3, making her ineffective in close quarters combat. Likewise, you have her height at 16 ft, when it’s always been 27 ft. This further makes her an ineffective warrior and fighter, which contradicts her prior portrayal. Thus, you changed her function from Warrior to Sniper/Scout and her new weapons reflect that. The scout part is fine as she can have that kind of ability and still be a warrior, too. But, for her to suddenly be a sniper when she’s never been that before in the game is too much of a stretch. She would’ve shown those skills before now.
Furthermore, you make mention of some kind of uncontrollable rage, which is also something she’s never exhibited before in the game. It also seems to at least partially come from her frustration of being small, but she’s supposed to be 27 feet so her stature is not that small. It just doesn’t fit with the pre-established character. She could be upset over having a fragile frame, that's consistent with her prior portrayal and you did keep her endurance the same. But unless you can come up with a reason why she hasn’t let that rage out yet, I don’t see it working. However, I am open to ideas.
A different alt mode is fine as long as there is an in-game explanation for the change from car to motorcycle. She can still be a cycle at 27 ft since Chromia is about the same height and is also a cycle. Arcee recently was damaged by an irate Red Alert so she could’ve gone into a CR chamber for repairs and programmed it to also change her alt mode. That’s definitely workable.
My advice is to go with the already approved profile that currently exists. I’m sure you’ve probably seen it. If you want to add the scout aspect (making her a Warrior/Scout) and a new alt mode that’s okay. Those aren’t really big changes and don’t contradict what’s come before. However, her height and stats have to stay the same as the original profile and thus a lot of what you wrote for her new profile, abilities and weaknesses can’t be used since they’re directly related.
Again, it’s not that new players can’t modify certain small aspects of a character. That’s been done before. Some players have even rewritten profiles, putting them in their own words. However, at the same time, the characters in those cases are not altered in any substantial way. It just has to flow with what the character was before and not be too big of a difference.
So, if you are still interested in Arcee, I would go with the original profile and maybe make some of those small changes that I mentioned and we’ll have another look at it. Also, if you have any questions you’re more than welcome to PM me. I'm always more than willing to help out.
