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Well someone seemed a little dissapointed there. Guess he really wanted that transforming chalkboard eraser they were speculating about.

Hmm...I have to use my memory here...but this may be useful (or just looking into it too much).

It says that Veritechnoid is from Hastings, MN. I'm in Richfield, MN. A while back when I first started posting online; someone asked me how close Richfield was to Hastings because they lived there (about 30 miles S-SW from Richfield)...

...but TFans.com must have deleted the thread because I can't find it now. It was the one that had the colorful map of the USA on it and people would add thier pic and name to it and draw a line to their hometown. The title was something like, "Where is everybody? Sho' yourself!". I remember it well because they asked me directly via a post how far Richfield was from Hastings...but now I can't find the post.

...However, if memory serves me correctly, I believe that it was "GalaxyConvoy" from Transfandom forums. I can't recall if that was his name on TFans; but I think that's him (I just checked Transfandom and it says he's in Hastings, so I think I'm remebering it right; but I'm not 100% sure).

I like how it backfired on him.

Gryph wrote:I like how it backfired on him.

yeah, rather funny how they`re tearing into that Primal Rage guy for the gay comment aimed at me and not us for the hoax.

Just a small idea. Reprolabels is holding a Faction Design contest, so maybe we could send them one of the two faction logos? The Reformers one is the best candidate, IMO.

Ra88 wrote:Just a small idea. Reprolabels is holding a Faction Design contest, so maybe we could send them one of the two faction logos? The Reformers one is the best candidate, IMO.

Could be a nice idea, but, what are the terms of the contest?, I wouldn't want them to get any rights over the designs.

Iskander wrote:

Ra88 wrote:Just a small idea. Reprolabels is holding a Faction Design contest, so maybe we could send them one of the two faction logos? The Reformers one is the best candidate, IMO.

Could be a nice idea, but, what are the terms of the contest?, I wouldn't want them to get any rights over the designs.

I agree with Isk...if we could get them to do that; that would be excellent! But at the same time; I think that we should still have control over the rights of the faction symbol.

so, i guess this is where i might be able to get the full scoop on the transtopians story right? um, well if you need another artist or for that matter another writer, i can be your guy, i can't quite kit bash yet as i am unfortunately in iraq but i will say that if you need a sample of writing or some of my art, then i can defintely submit what ever you feel necessary.

original_galvatron_01 wrote:so, i guess this is where i might be able to get the full scoop on the transtopians story right? um, well if you need another artist or for that matter another writer, i can be your guy, i can't quite kit bash yet as i am unfortunately in iraq but i will say that if you need a sample of writing or some of my art, then i can defintely submit what ever you feel necessary.

Finally, someone with interest! Well, I would appreciate a sample of your work (fanart, fanfic) to get a good feel of your skills.

ok i will do as bet as i can unfortunately i am without scanner, we are packing to leave iraq here in a few weeks or so. and i will get you a fan fic i have been writing for a little bit as fast as possible but does anyone have any ideas on how to start the story line? because i would like to know where exactly in the story we are going to start, would it be like right at the beginning of the transtopians war? or would it be before the war to give premise to the way the cybertronians became cybertopians? just wondering about the meat and potatoes of the project is all.

original_galvatron_01 wrote:ok i will do as bet as i can unfortunately i am without scanner, we are packing to leave iraq here in a few weeks or so. and i will get you a fan fic i have been writing for a little bit as fast as possible but does anyone have any ideas on how to start the story line? because i would like to know where exactly in the story we are going to start, would it be like right at the beginning of the transtopians war? or would it be before the war to give premise to the way the cybertronians became cybertopians? just wondering about the meat and potatoes of the project is all.

Well, the original plan was that the fanfics would cover the ground inbetween each comic (the first one being the origin story, then a few fanfics, then the second comic being a few months later, etc.), but since we don't have anyone for the comic right now...Just show me any old fanfics you've written, or just write a random Transformers tale. Then we can start talking about the Transtopia stuff.

ok this isn't much but i can dig deep to come with a bit of something, when i first saw this project come up on the front page i went to work and created 2 bio for 2 seperate transformers, one former autobot, and the other a former decepticon a partnership with these 2 seemed almost to enticing to pass up so here are the bio's for syntax, and error. it's not much but it is a beginning and everystory no matter how small has to have a beginning right? here we go with these 2...

transtopians Syntax & Error

Data: Syntax Itellingence Field tatcitian

Data: Error Recon and Scout Minicon

Alignments: Syntax Autobot (Machine)

Alignments: Error Decepticon (Machine/Reformer)

Syntax Bio:

Syntax was not an active autobot during the dark ages and the age of wrath, he was intelligence and field almost as smart as perceptor, and as brave and as fool hardy as hot rod, he's managed to prove himself time and again to his autobot comrades. with this oopertunity presented to him, Syntax jumped at the chance to finally acheive peice for a small portion of cybertrons inhabitants. he is now part of the machine forces still in his main job he has been reconfigured to aclimate his existence on cybertopia, he is a masive robot much larger than some, and some might see him as the brawn but he is just as much brains as he is brute strength. his alternate mode is an amrored carrier, for his long trips carrying classified information from the data banks of the planets records to his library of knowledge, which he annotates all the planet's findings, and has his partner Error to help him. Since the insurrection, he has often wondered if he has been on the wrong side of the conflict between the Reformers and the Machine. although since then he hasn't been able to question such motvies behind the war because of the constant tasks handed to him by the Machine leader Eternus.

Error Bio:
Error a decepticon born straight from Vector Sigma back on cybertron was one of many of the distpatched by soundwave. he, Rumble, and Frenzy are quite the devestation team once you get to the fact that they were built for demelotion, but sensing a withdraw from the others, soundwave had him reconfigured to be a solo reconnasaince and scouting robot instead, this triggered Error to become more independent, and secretly want revenge for being excluded from the cassette click that SoundWave had made. Since being on Cybertopia Error has bonded with Syntax, creating his own link with him, sometimes seeming cold and distant, Error doesn't like to think of how he was "mistreated" by SoundWave, but now focuses on his new partnership with Syntax as a chance to prove himself to anyone that might not think Error capable of handling the large task presented to him. since being recofigured for life on Cybertopia, Error is now able to transform into a militaristic looking weapon to go on board of Syntax during convoy transports of data. Error's accuracy is that of a nuetron laser and can shoot down an enemy from over a 1000 meters away. Error also senses Syntax distrust of the Machine and has tried on his own to uncover the truth behind what has been happening to the populus, even going as far as to secretly joining the Reformers to better ubderstand what he has been experiencing, as memories have been pouring through him and making him recall the dark times of cybertron history he wishes to forget...


Syntax Stats:

Strength: 8.5
Dexterity: 6.0
Wisdom: 8.5
Intellgience: 10.0+
Speed: 6.0
Durability: 9.0
Rank: 8.0

Error Stats:

Strength: 5.0
Dexterity: 9.0
Wisdom: 8.5
Intelligence: 7.0
Speed: 10.0
Durability: 5.0
Rank: 6.0

When combined into their Vehicle/ weapon modes, the duo is almost unstopable. their combined efforts reflect their promise to becoming the only noted Decepticon/Autobot partnership in the histories of both cybertron and cybertopia.
With Syntax in robot mode Error can be a powerful gun to be used for offense as well as defense. and what Syntax lacks in the fire power department Error makes up for in spades. there are times however the duo doesn't see eye to eye, as they sometimes have disagreements as to how to handle situations, but other than that, the 2 make an awesome force to be reckoned with. even Eternus sees the potential these 2 have together, as well as the entire Reformers side of the house see what the 2 have accomplished, and Eternus fears losing them to the Reformer cause, making making him keep Syntax and Error close at all times, Eternus sense Error's waving alegiance and faultering ideals, and wants to re-erase Error's programing thus far, but it has been Syntax's hope that Error will be alright and to let him be guardian of him until the war is over...

Syntax's moto: What doesn't kill you makes you stronger, but i can find it's weakness.

Error's moto: if you think i'm bad now, let me prove you wrong!








well, i hope that is what would be a good fleshing out of the characters, and i will add a short with them in it later but other than that if you have any thoughts as to what might need improving by all means criticize away, it's ok i can take it. any how please enjoy for what little it is worth,

It was a good read, but you asked for some critics, so here they are.

First off, the Eternus I wrote wouldn't concern himself with trivial matters like that, and instead would rather have one of his generals handle it. In this case, I would say Panzer is perfect (especially for Error), since he's the most military one of the Inner Gear, and as a Decepticon he would try and manipulate/sway Error to his side.

Second off, they are t?? skilled, and don't seem to have the flaws to make up for it. I always felt that there was a balance in the cast, with only a few being truely skilled and powerfull (not counting Eternus, since he is basically the supreme Transtopian). I would suggest tuning it down a bit, so that their skills are still extraordinary, but not large enough to let the Reformers and Machines fight over them.

Lastly, the way you wrote them, it appears as if they still have their memories, with one reference in Error's bio stating otherwise (which was a bit confusing). Try to remember that it will take an immense affort(speling check) for them to regain even the smallest memory.

Hope that helped.

ok refined the bios some more and not quite sure how you wanted the short story brought to you but i will put it oin this reply sorry this will be the largest one but hey it is better than nothing right? again i loved you opiniond and criticisms they helpout the direction of my bio and story a little more unfortunately, i forgot to write down some of the names but if anything i will get then names and write them into the bio and create a better story anyhow here we go...

transtopians Syntax & Error

Data: Syntax Itellingence Field tatcitian

Data: Error Recon and Scout Minicon

Alignments: Syntax Autobot (Machine)

Alignments: Error Decepticon (Machine/Reformer)

Syntax Bio:

Syntax was not an active autobot during the dark ages and the age of wrath, he was intelligence and field almost as smart as perceptor, he's managed to prove himself time and again to his autobot comrades. he is now part of the machine forces still in his main job he has been reconfigured to aclimate his existence on cybertopia, he is a masive robot much larger than some, and some might see him as the brawn but he is more brains than he is brute strength. his alternate mode is an amrored carrier, for his long trips carrying classified information from the data banks of the planets records to his library of knowledge, which he annotates all the planet's findings, and has his partner Error to help him. Since the insurrection, he has often wondered if he has been on the wrong side of the conflict between the Reformers and the Machine. although since then he hasn't been able to question such motvies behind the war because of the constant tasks handed to him by the Machine. His one true weakness is that he over anylizes his data, often finding the simplist error in any data tracks he quickly trashes his findings and begins a new. he doesn't have much of anything weapon wise except for Error. This has also bread a bit of an ego into Syntax, for he gloats at every finding he gets and assimilates into his mind for processing, which takes away from some of his other qualities greatly.

Error Bio:
Error a decepticon born straight from Vector Sigma back on cybertron was one of many of the distpatched by soundwave. he, Rumble, and Frenzy are quite the devestation team once you get to the fact that they were built for demelotion, but sensing a withdrawl from the others, soundwave had him reconfigured to be a solo reconnasaince and scouting robot instead, this triggered Error to become more independent, and secretly wanted revenge for being excluded from the cassette clique that SoundWave had made. Since being on Cybertopia Error has bonded with Syntax, creating his own link with him, sometimes seeming cold and distant, since being recofigured for life on Cybertopia, Error is now able to transform into a militaristic looking weapon to go on board of Syntax during convoy transports of data. Error's accuracy is that of a nuetron laser and can shoot down an enemy from over a 1000 meters away. Error has been recently getting involved with the Reformers cause and this makes one of many technical problems for the duo. general _________ is seeing a change in this once born decepticon and watches him carefully, and waits for the moment he can lull Error away to his dark designs. If anything could be said bad about Error it is his arrogance, he let's his feats go to his head and often tries to bite off more than he can process. it usually takes Syntax to make him see the Wrong points of using his power for his benefit instead of using it for the good of the Cybertopians and the machine. Error makes a bad habit of trying to prove himself too much and often finds himself look at as a clutz in some aspects as well.


Syntax Stats:

Strength: 5.0
Dexterity: 6.0
Wisdom: 8.5
Intellgience: 10.0+
Speed: 6.0
Durability: 9.0
Rank: 7.5

Error Stats:

Strength: 5.0
Dexterity: 9.0
Wisdom: 6.0
Intelligence: 7.0
Speed: 10.0
Durability: 5.0
Rank: 6.0

When combined into their Vehicle/ weapon modes, the duo is almost unstopable. their combined efforts reflect their promise to becoming the only noted Decepticon/Autobot partnership in the histories of both cybertron and cybertopia.
With Syntax in robot mode Error can be a powerful gun to be used for offense as well as defense. and what Syntax lacks in the fire power department Error makes up for in spades. there are times however the duo doesn't see eye to eye, as they sometimes have disagreements as to how to handle situations. Syntax sometimes has to remind Error that his abilities are limited in the strength department and that he should focus more on jobs that are of his stature. Error's waining alegiance to the machine forces hasn't gone unoticed either, for it has caused both Syntax, and General __________ to question his motives in this world.



Syntax's moto: What doesn't kill you makes you stronger, but i can find it's weakness.

Error's moto: if you think i'm bad now, let me prove you wrong!

and here is the story sorry forgot to grab it and put it with the bio but i think it will be better this way...



Setting: Transtopian Biological area forest. Day break, the Transtopians Syntax and Error are scouting the last area of know Reformer activity. Syntax findings lead to no Reformers, but to some amazing life forms and various creatures, while Error is lookout. they are drawing to a close of their findings as conversation is struck up between the 2...

Syntax: This is fascinating! i have recorded over 10 new species of Bio-organisms found today alone i will surely get rewarded for this!

Error: Geez, is that all you think about? you know there is more to life than just cataloguing life, there IS living it as well."

Syntax: "And we aren't doing that now?"

Error: "No, just observing it, not actually interacting with it. I swear sometimes, you rbrain gets in the way of your spark!"

Syntax: "I don't believe that at all, infact, I believe I am living my life to it's maximum potential!"

Error: "Sure, whatever you say..."

Syntax: "I DO say. Now we are ready to leave, are you ready Error?"

Error: "I guess so, you ever wonder if any of these creatures we record can communicate with us?"

Syntax: "No, I don't. They are barely intelligable. Besides, if they did i am sure none of them would want to speak to us."

Error: "I dunno, I mean they could be able to speak but just afraid."

Syntax: "Afraid? Of what?"

Error: "Of us, of the conflict between us and the Reformers. You ever think we are on the wrong..."

Syntax: "NO! I don't. No more of this kind of talking. I would like to think we are as far away from the conflict between the Machine and the Refromers as possible."

Error: "If you say so, let's head back to the base."

as Syntax transforms into his carrier mode, Error quickly moves to cover some other foot prints that are not his, they are of another robot, a Reformer to be precise. This is something Error doen't want Syntax seeing for it may concern him with with how safe they are, and Error knows they are safer than being in the Machine base libraries.

On the way back Syntax and Error find themselves relaxing while rolling down the metallic road that leads to Machine HQ. Error gets anxious suddenly, and starts talking to Syntax again.

Error: "Do you think our force against the Reformers is neccessary?"

Syntax: "Why do you ask such things Error?"

Error: "Because i feel that if we could talk to them face to face, it would be different."

Syntax: "Well, it would be a blessed reliefe to these hit and runs as of late."

Error: "Yeah! And then, maybe we could work things out and bring both sides of the house together again!"

Syntax: "But, that is if they would listen to us. I highly doubt that will happen anytime soon Error."

Error: "See it is that brain of yours getting in the way of the bigger picture!"

Error dislodges from Syntax and transforms into his robot form.

Error: "You always have a closed mind! That is why OUR work suffers so much, Because you don't believe in possibility! You don't want there to be any from of error in your work! what if there is? You scrap everything and then start from cog 1!"

Syntax: "How dare you say such a thing! I do not want there to be error in my logic because i want everything to be right, accurate, complete. If it weren't for me, we would be neck deep in unrefined data!"

Error: "All work and no play makes Syntax a dull bot!"

Syntax: "I am NOT dull! Take it back now, or so help me i won't carry you back to HQ!"

Error: "And in that sentence alone, you have provided your own error!"

Syntax: "WHAT!?"

Error: Yeah! you assume i need your help, I don't! I'm walking to let off some steam, later!"

Syntax: "Wait! Error!"

Leaving Syntax by the side of the road, Error walks off into the deepest part of the Biological habbitats for the local wildlife. Things look a lot bigger to the samll bot, as he looks at the long looming shadows of dusk. Error starts to feel bad for Syntax because he hasn't seen the light the reformers bring to the chaos that is the machine, if only he could see for himself what it is he was talking about, but, the Reforomers, would they allow Syntax to findout everything about them? Would they allow Syntax to be shown every single detail of their existance? Error ponders such things and then realizes he is now lost in the dense forrest of the habbitat.

Error: "Hey, where am I? What's this place?"

Error stumbles around for a while not being able to make any noticable land marks out. Suddnely he lands in a puddle of murky water, Picking himself up he grumbles aloud.

Error: "AH man! now i have to get rebuffed! This stuff never gets out easily either. I can only hope it doesn't get into my circuitry!"

Error: "Hello!? Anyone out there? Hel~lo!?"

Error starts to panic because he's forgotten to mark his way like a scout should, and now completely lost he sits down and feels alone for the first time in a long time.

Error: "Man, I shouldn't have done that to Syntax, he's alright, just a little hard headed sometimes, and it's not like i am wrong! He doesn't put the chance for error into his studies, if he did then maybe he would get better findings and maybe, i would be able to help him better as a partner, make things more enjoyable, life-like."

Just then a Giant hand scoops up Error like a vulture grabbing prey Error yells out to anyone that will here, but it doesn't help if he doesn't know how far away help can be. 'Is this it?' he wonders, obviously forgetting about the fact that he has friends on boths sides of the war.

Syntax: "Error! Error! calm down Error, it is only me!"

Error looks up to see a face that is alien and familiar to him all at the same time, not Syntax but of someone else he hasn't seen or maybe he has, someone from the past. He can't make out the face long enough for it fades into Syntax's face and Error calms down almost as soon as the image is gone.

Error: "Syntax? How'd you find me?"

Syntax: "For someone with scout class programming, you make very obvious trails." (Syntax chuckles a little at Error.)

Error: "Look, Syntax..." (Error chokes a little as he tries to apologize for earlier.)

Syntax: "Look Error, I know what you are saying. We don't always like to see our own faults, especially me."

Error looks up at his partners face to see a gentle set of optics looking down on him.

Error: "So, your not mad at me? You don't want to hurt me?"

Syntax: "What? What gave you that idea?"

Error: "I just assumed that..."

Syntax cuts off Error in mid-sentence.

Syntax: "If we are to be partners we must always be able to trust eachother and be able to communicate with eachother as well. Besides, If I did that i would be no better than those Reformers..."

Error holds back a defense for them to sit there and cautiously agree with him.

Error: "hey , wanna get back to the capital?"

Syntax: "Sounds good to me."

Syntax transforms to vehicle mode again, Error looks around one more time to see if anyone has been there, still a little uneasy he transforms to weapon mode and mounts to Syntax.

Error: "Hey Syntax..."

Syntax: "Yes Error?"

Error: "Do you think we were born here? Like our sparks were created here?"

Syntax: "It is almost a certainty."

Error: "Almost?"

Syntax: "Well, who would i be if i didn't put 'Error' into my thesis'?"

Error: "Now your mocking me..."

Syntax and Error ride off to the Mchines' HQ arguing into the sunset. All the while, a mystreious set of eyes watching them as they ride away, who is that spies on them? Friend, or foe? Machine espianogue, or Reformer scout? Find out soon...[/b]

That was a good read, very character driven, even if it was a bit simple at some points, like him getting scared, it reminded me off a children's book, so you might want to improve that a bit. Also, the only HQ is Eternus' Tower in the middle of the Capital, so perhaps you could write that they will return to a research outpost instead?

It has been so long I've posted anything here, it feel kinda weird, but galvatron interest kinda renewed my own interst in this whole thing, anyway, I'll try and give it a read to this story; but I'm more interested in seeing your art.

Primus knows we need an artist so badly

Hope some more people of the old gang show up too

Iskander wrote:Primus knows we need an artist so badly

Indeed.

ok cool and i am currently working on the art situation now gonna get 3 good thumbs atleast and then reveal the concept of syntax and error as best i can, if that doesn't seem to happen i will do my best to use paint to draw them out, i have become increasingly good at paint now and doing transformers seems to be easier on it ironically but i can't seem to shade too well. any i will bring a few more stories in later on.

ok sorry to do ask but was there anything else i needed to do to the bio for syntax and error? and did you want me to post that else where? if you could give some guidance on the it would be great, thanks again for the critque! i really enjoy hear what i need work on to make myself better at writing, plus it helps me make it more enjoyable for others as well, thanks again sorry i use a lot of thread space though.

The only thing I would change is making Error one of the prototype 'casetticons' and not the real ones, but has to do more with personal preference then with plot development. So no changes needed!

And what do you mean with 'posting it elsehwere'? Different section of the site, or another site altogether?

what i meant was that should i post the bio in the character site then? or is that something you do or what, i mean, a little light on the situation would help guide me as to what's next and i am trying to get the drawings on my comp as we speak, i hope that they turn out well, because i have no scanner, i have to use a digital cam and take pic of my pics ironically. but soon, it will all change for the better that i can assure you.

Well, Pepie always did the frontpage work, but since he's disappeared again, you can post it in the Bio's Thread: http://www.tfmaster.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=1799&start=0

I liked the story too, just make the few mods Ra said and I think you'll have a quite good story set in the Transtopians reality.