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That...felt like a terrible waste of time to me.

There is no way possible that this is the real script idea. Why?

1.) The grammar is terrible. I have no room to talk, given that my grammar is terrible, however, it takes one to know one, and whoever wrote this is clearly not a professional. Too many errors.

2.) It's TOO Geewunified. Borrowing some elements would've been fine, but to this level of excess? No. Bay wouldn't go bassackwards at this point. Especially with the robot designs and Prime's vehicle mode. No.

3.) It jumped back and forth way too much. Way too much. The first movie suffered from horrific jump cuts. They handled this aspect of the film making process much better in ROTF, and I sincerely doubt Bay would fail to employ the same methods that gave him such a rousing success with the sequel. Bay's a creature of habit, if he sees that something's working, he sticks with it.

4.) It would alienate the audience far too much (which would hurt their bottom line), and it would be an absolute snorefest. If you, like me, thought the first was boring, this one would make the first Bayhemer look like a fast paced, super epic. (Yes, this was really that bad.)

5.) I see Devastator as being a one off. I mean, considering all of the clones in the Egypt battle, it would've been easy for them to form an army of Devastators, yet only one existed. Why? (I mean besides budget and time) Why now, all of a sudden, would combiners be a dime a dozen like this? It just doesn't sit right with me. It feels...fake. Terribly fake.

6.) Anyone....ANYone could buy a stamp and make their's look official.

I will say this, there were some great Sam moments, but without his parents in the mix, it just doesn't work as well. I mean, if you're going to have a human cast, have the whole cast. They work better as a unit, rather than split up and others not being used at all.

IF (and that's a tremendous if) this thing happens to be even 50% real, then I can finally say this would be one TF movie I could find myself skipping. Unless it was wow inducing and really made a dent in the box office and wowed audiences....I don't see myself giving in to watch a mess like what was seen in this joke of a story.

It screamed fanfiction. As fanfiction goes, it wasn't too bad. Not great, not even close, but not too bad. As for TF3? No. Doesn't even remotely feel like a Bay helmed "masterpiece".

Regardless if it's real, hoax, or somewhere in the middle it is a fun read. I read all 126 pages in one sitting and throughly enjoyed it, granted I'm a sucker for anything Transformers, time travel, or paradoxes so all three together was a treat. Here's hoping that if this is nowhere near the movie it'll see some other media, maybe a year long comic series to encompass the obvious opening for the next movie or form the basis of another comic storyline/continuity.

Fanfic. NEXT!

Read the whole thing... yeah that isn't real. While much of it was clever, it contained almost no action at all, and it was a constant GEEEWUUNNN jerk fest.

i absolutely loved it and think this would make a far superior film to the 1st 2 (and i loved those as well). But that being said, it does sound way too good to be true. There wasn't a single thing i disliked and it retcons in such a way that fills in some of the plot holes in the previous movies...and it actually makes sense. So therefore no way it's real, but it would be awesome if it was.

How did that make sense? The allspark can be manipulated and used to create a time field. What? The way they back was just like in Beast Wars. Starscream takes a new F-15 form and changes his paint job. Why, the military jets are not coloured that way. What possible reason would he have for the colour change. Mirage as an F1 vehicle, come on. "Prime, lose the flames", did the fan who wrote this not like the flames? :crying:

Starscream would never destroy the Allspark. He needed it to take command of the Decepticons. So how were the Autobots fooled by a simple explosion. Wouldn't it still give of readings if it was on the other side of Mars. Also, Mars is converted into a new Cybertron and the Autobots set up shop. Why did they go there and how did they know it was there? The Decepticons push them off and onto earth. The humans just say "sure build a city here, even though your enemies are not far away and can destroy our cities at will". Please tell me which of these things make sense. Another thing, MB loves Sam's parent's and would insist they were in it.

I have read some of the first pages and I agree when some people say that it's fan-fiction. Not to boast, but I'm familiar with professionally written scripts; most of the writing seems like an emulation.

That said, if (very big if for a very small possibility) this was a real draft, then I do hope we get to see more of Ratchet than ROTF allowed (maybe a full transformation sequence for once). And, a note to the producers whatever the story; keep Jolt and Sideswipe!

Who ever wrote that should just stop writing. What a waste of time...and trying to pull it off as legit. I mean, come on, time traveling, all those ridiculous references, I'm surprised they didn't make one of the plot points finding one-eyed willies treasure "It wasn't gold...it was...ALPHA TRION...HEY YOU GUUUUUUYYYYYYYYYSSSSSSSSSSSSS".

I thougth Unicron was going to be in the 3. movie? I do not se him in this script.

Also have a little hard time buying the whole time travel thing.

Very well done fan fiction definetly!!! The little Energon & lot of luck line gave it away for me. it seems like they sat down and watched the G1 animated movie & tried to figure out how to blend it together with the movie verse. Again very well done & worth the read for S's & G's, but way too good to be true for Mr. Bay to use. ( although he could take some notes!!!)

Noideaforaname wrote: Decepticons suffer key losses while Autobots suffer none (UGH!!!!!)
ugh

Why? Why are these decepticons so weak? They are definitely depicted as a bunch of incapacitated warriors.

Just finished it and I thought it was cute.

I'm gonna give it a shot... Okay this took me about 30 minutes.

Optimus agrees to reveal their existence to the world to prevent war between the US and Egypt for destroying the Pyramids. The population is split between acceptance and terror. Megatron is being repaired while Starscream harbors traitorous thoughts. Leo, Sam and Mikaela open a side business of selling Motorcycle and Car calendars attached to her fathers repair/custom shop. Simmons has officially joined up with NEST as their PR guy since the reveal.

A disturbance around Neptune has caught the attention of astronomers as its image disappear from view. It appears that a Primordial Black Hole has entered the system. When Neptune completely disappears, a pulse is emitted from the Black Hole. Every bot, Autobot on Earth or Decepticon on Saturn's Moon, takes notice.

Megatron laughs maniacally on the repair slab, Optimus tells the humans that it's not just a Black Hole and Starscream panics as he exclaims to Megatron, "That's Unicron! What are we going to do?" Megatron laughs as he answers, "We Die."

Unicron eats the Decepticon moon base and they flee to Mars. The NEST force improvises and sends a frontline to Mars. The final battle between the Bot's and Con's takes place on the barren surface of Mars until Unicron closes in.

Together the two rival forces team up to destroy this beast the only way they can: Infiltrate his chassis, locate his core and disable the EM fields that keep his Black Hole 'battery' from devouring him from the inside out.

Everyone dies and Sam is the only one left and alone in Unicron's Core. Thinking of his parents and everyone else on earth, he throws himself into the mechanics in a heroic sacrifice that results in Unicron's self destruction. Humanity is saved and forever after the new shadow in the sky is a reminder of Witwicky's mantra: No Sacrifice, No Victory!

The End.

[edit- I kinda like this idea, I'm gonna flesh it out some and put it up in the Transtopia forum.]

This will be the film i'll be watching in my head, while bays tf3 is playing, probably during the mudflap humping sams mother scene!

wow. that was a good read! i loved it! but i really doubt any of it will happen in the movie. but it was simply amazing to read.

Doubledealer25 wrote:wow. that was a good read! i loved it! but i really doubt any of it will happen in the movie. but it was simply amazing to read.

Really?

Amazing?

If that was a movie I'd walk out.

It had me interested til the time traveling back to the 80's bit. Then it was all down hill. That was really, REALLY BAD.

Yeah, I just finished reading it and it does seem a little too good to be true, with a lot of 80's generation one characters in the mix. There is even a Stunticon cameo in the beginning. But truthfully I doubt very much that this film will be made as it is written in the treatment. For one they want to have Chevy sponsor them again to cut production costs and that means they need to have/show certain car models and so on. For the Transformer films are essentially 2 plus hour long car commercials, which really needs to stop if you ask me. Also if they go back in time to the 80's they should go all out and have all the characters be what they were in the 80's, including VW bugs, tape recorders, Guns and all the size changing abilities they threw out the window. There is also no reason why Sam and Leo would be working at some scientific research facility, as there is nothing in Sam's character development thus far that says he is any sort of intellectual or even that smart. All he does is react to situations, but that could be his mediocre acting. Unless you want to say the Cube has permanently made him a genius or something, as that could explain his working in the scientific field(s)? But that still doesn't account for Leo who was annoying as hell in the first film and just a bit of racial pandering if you ask me ( Like Skids and Mudflap). I would rather they bring in Raul and team him up with Tracks, as that would be a much better fit if they are trying to gain a larger Hispanic audience. Either way Bay has also hinted that he was going to bring Unicron into the film, so who knows where that would lead. I also doubt the film will end as a cliffhanger, but then again you never know. Maybe they are trying to gage the communities reactions to this supposed script. I just know they need to actually have a real story this time, and more than just the fluff they have been delivering so far. They also need better toys and better designs for their toys. They are unnecessarily or overtly complicated, paneled, detailed, layer, and over thought for the most part. Sometimes less is more, anyone with a background in design could tell you that. Sideswipe was one of the only decent new figures, while the rest were slightly overkill if you ask me. But then again no everyone can be happy.

what am i saying. the script is just too good to be true. i mean i can't imagine how the studios are gonna fit giant bots with small sized humans into one film. i think the writers are just fooling us.

Didn't read it. Not going to read it. If this individual had actually just been straightforward and presented their work as fan-fiction, maybe then I would read it but I have no intention of indulging this lying piss-ant regardless of how much time was put into this supposed "script". Just the very fact that another member of the TF Fandom would pull such an infantile stunt is insulting to me and, I would hope, be insulting to all the rest of you. Only thing worse than this blatant hoax would be an actual "working" script with a Unicron plot. I'd buy off on the second coming of Primus before I'd pay to see that plot on the big screen...again.

I read the "script" last night, and my first thougth was that is was great.

Then i started to reflect upon what i had just read, and some elements in the script started to become not so great. After a good nights sleep i have become more and more unsatisfied with the whole time travel aspect. I personally do not see any need for the Transformers to be reformattet into vehicles of the 80'ties. I am fine with Optimus Prime being a longnosed truck (though i would not mind losing the blue flames).

To me, the Transformers is more appealing, when their story takes place in the same present, that i myself is living in (and this comes from a guy, who is not really that satisfied with the two movies so far). Personally i would prefer them (Michael Bay & company) to improve on what they have already established (and by improve i mean get a descent story put together this time), instead of doing something totally different, as it is my feeling this leaked script is.

Finally i was also hoping for Unicron to be in the third movie. More or less for no other reason than i am curious for his moviedesign (because after the first two movies i have more or less given up upon the moviescripts).

So in essence i for my part hope this leaked script here is indeed a fans creation, and not the actual script.

GetterDragun wrote:

Doubledealer25 wrote:wow. that was a good read! i loved it! but i really doubt any of it will happen in the movie. but it was simply amazing to read.

Really?

Amazing?

If that was a movie I'd walk out.

Thank you. *claps*

D-340 wrote:It had me interested til the time traveling back to the 80's bit. Then it was all down hill. That was really, REALLY BAD.

Bad? It was terrible!

Personally, I'd love this to be the actual script. Though I could happily live without seeing Leo ever again. Bring back Anthony Anderson!

I've never been a fan of Wheeljack or Perceptor but they are infinitely preferable to the awful twins. Havin actually enjoyed Defiance, I'd like to see Prowl in the next one. I loved the parents in the first one but they were terribly written in ROTF.

I also hope alien heads are kept to a minimum. Prime has a G1-esque head, why couldn't the others?

Anyway, I would be very happy to see this in the cinema. It's Shakespeare compared to ROTF, but then so is your average tech spec.

Autobot032 wrote:

GetterDragun wrote:

Doubledealer25 wrote:wow. that was a good read! i loved it! but i really doubt any of it will happen in the movie. but it was simply amazing to read.

Really?

Amazing?

If that was a movie I'd walk out.

Thank you. *claps*

D-340 wrote:It had me interested til the time traveling back to the 80's bit. Then it was all down hill. That was really, REALLY BAD.

Bad? It was terrible!

Thank you! I tried to read.... But time travel? Everyone taking alt modes of 80's vehiles?
To those that liked that...... "story", is this really what you want? Personaly, i felt that was an insult to anything TF related. This is not G1. We don't need these G1 refrances. Anyways, the story was so cheezy.... I mean seriously. I don't get it.

If this is what "The fans" want to see in a TF movie, then no wonder Bay & company have steered clear of fan made scripts and ideas. Unbelieveable.

That was a "fun" way to spend an hour. I just read it in one sitting and it was entertaining. NO WAY it's the treatment for TF 3 but not a terrible read by any means. The fact that the Ark is included is a dead give away cause Bay said the dosen't understand why robots that turn into vehicles would need any form of transportation to travel thru space, hence the proto forms and Starscream and Megatron flying in their alt modes thru space.

Also, I can't remember but does Paramount own Knight Rider? If not then the KITT references would never make it into the script as amusing as they were. Ever notice Bumblebee only quotes paramount owned properties like Star Trek and not Star Wars?

Autobot032 wrote:

GetterDragun wrote:

Doubledealer25 wrote:wow. that was a good read! i loved it! but i really doubt any of it will happen in the movie. but it was simply amazing to read.

Really?

Amazing?

If that was a movie I'd walk out.

Thank you. *claps*

D-340 wrote:It had me interested til the time traveling back to the 80's bit. Then it was all down hill. That was really, REALLY BAD.

Bad? It was terrible!

Bad, terrible, horrible, awful, heinous, horrendous, nausea inducing, take your pick. Even as fanfic, it sucks.