Please read my new story

It isn't really new, had a thread with it a while back, but I never typed up the last of it.
It's called The Horror at Brookville Lake. I would love it so much if you guys could read it and make a comment/review of it.
http://horroratbrookville.weebly.com
I keep getting screwed on every single post I make, and so that there can be no loop-holes discovered, I am going to stress that THIS IS A NON-PROFIT WEBSITE!!!!
The comments are under the 'Discussion' page.
It's called The Horror at Brookville Lake. I would love it so much if you guys could read it and make a comment/review of it.
http://horroratbrookville.weebly.com
I keep getting screwed on every single post I make, and so that there can be no loop-holes discovered, I am going to stress that THIS IS A NON-PROFIT WEBSITE!!!!
The comments are under the 'Discussion' page.