A random drabble I've written
A random drabble I've written
Posted by Universal Prime Mon Nov 08, 2010 11:13 am
I've gotten the luck to have a literature Professor to review it, and this version is modified based on his critiques.
Those hands, I can't forget those silly, delicate hands. Always spinning and dancing and cutting away, spinning and dancing and crushing away, twirling and whirling and warping around and away. No escape, no escape. Every time I close my eyes they come back. Any serenity I gain is lost by their image. No escape, no escape, nothing can get me away from those dancing, enthusiastic, delicate hands and their diamond fingers.......
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Re: A random drabble I've written
Posted by Counterpunch Mon Nov 08, 2010 12:27 pm
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Re: A random drabble I've written
Posted by Universal Prime Mon Nov 08, 2010 3:31 pm
Someone going mad. This was written on impulse.Counterpunch wrote:Context?
Those hands, I can't forget those silly, delicate hands. Always spinning and dancing and cutting away, spinning and dancing and crushing away, twirling and whirling and warping around and away. No escape, no escape. Every time I close my eyes they come back. Any serenity I gain is lost by their image. No escape, no escape, nothing can get me away from those dancing, enthusiastic, delicate hands and their diamond fingers.......
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Re: A random drabble I've written
Posted by JetOptimus23 Mon Nov 08, 2010 7:23 pm
Universal Prime wrote:Those hands, I can't forget those silly, delicate hands. Always spinning and dancing and cutting away, spinning and dancing and crushing away, twirling and whirling and warping around and away. I cannot fathom how to get away. Every time I close my eyes they come back. Any peace of mind I gain is lost within their image. No escape, I can’t escape, nothing can get me away from those dancing, enthusiastic, delicate mechanical hands and their diamond encrusted fingers.......
I've gotten the luck to have a literature Professor to review it, and this version is modified based on his critiques.
This is awesome, but also slightly creepy. Is this from personal experience?
Currently on a quest to collect as many Unicron Trilogy toys as possible...maybe even complete the collection...
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Re: A random drabble I've written
Posted by Universal Prime Mon Nov 08, 2010 8:27 pm
Thank God no.JetOptimus23 wrote:Universal Prime wrote:Those hands, I can't forget those silly, delicate hands. Always spinning and dancing and cutting away, spinning and dancing and crushing away, twirling and whirling and warping around and away. I cannot fathom how to get away. Every time I close my eyes they come back. Any peace of mind I gain is lost within their image. No escape, I can’t escape, nothing can get me away from those dancing, enthusiastic, delicate mechanical hands and their diamond encrusted fingers.......
I've gotten the luck to have a literature Professor to review it, and this version is modified based on his critiques.
This is awesome, but also slightly creepy. Is this from personal experience?
Those hands, I can't forget those silly, delicate hands. Always spinning and dancing and cutting away, spinning and dancing and crushing away, twirling and whirling and warping around and away. No escape, no escape. Every time I close my eyes they come back. Any serenity I gain is lost by their image. No escape, no escape, nothing can get me away from those dancing, enthusiastic, delicate hands and their diamond fingers.......
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