Hi peoples,
I think bay would stay for the third instalment. Yess ROTF was a boxoffice succes but that's because it's Transformers! Even if people knew it had more gore/humor/cursing etc. they would still go. I didn't like a lot of stuff but still went for the second time tuesday. I just hope Bay gets shot with two or three tranquilizers during his directing, and that there are writers who can fucus on Transformers alone.
That said, I've read a lot of comments of a twelve year old could write a better story. And I've been saying the same thing. (well I actually said 8 year old) But then I thought, okay... proof it...
So yesterday night I layed down my writing skills. I'm 24 and a full time transformers fan so read at your own risk
Okay to Transformers 3:
The Decepticons are defeated, a few are in some sort of Transformer prison cells on earth underground. They are guarded by Autobots and the human military.
The remaining Decepticons are on the moon. Sometimes they make guerrilla raids on human energy power plants but the situation is easy on earth.
Autobots and humans are living together, and for the first time you actually see “civilian” autobots. Transformers who don't have weapons, who aren't well armored but are carriers, workers, builders etc. Non violent Transformers.
From the dead planet Cybertron two pods-protoforms launch and they heading towards Earth. 1 small protoform and one big protoform. These protoforms have a strange glow around them that indicate that they aren't normal Transformers.
Megatron is still plotting a way to get enough energon to activate more Decepticon protoforms. There might be a small organized Decepticon attack but the Autobots and human military force them to retreat. No killing in this scene.
In space Soundwave still is spying around. He picks up a signal. It's one of the 2 smaller strange protoforms. He tries to communicate his findings to Megatron but even his superior communication devices are no match for the other's jamming signals. Soundwave then tries to intercept the unknown transformer. The protoform transformers and engages Soundwave. The unknown transformer is called Shockwave and has a cool Cybertronian high maneuver aircraft alternative mode. But Soundwave is defeated and drifts damaged into space.
The big one arrives and lands/crashes on Earth. This Transformer is huge, he's Trypticon. Trypticon is spotted when he lands and the Autobots mobilize. Megatron sends out Starscream to have a look at the new Transformer. Megatron knows that it's not a Decepticon nor an Autobot. So Starscream spies on the situation to unfold.
The Autobots think it's a decepticon, a battle starts. When the autobots get on the scene they detect three Transformer protoforms on their radar. All of a sudden three Transformers attack them. These three are a lion like animal, a cybertronian mobile gun platform tank and a cybertronian attack yet. These three are engaging the autobots. The Autobots are present in good numbers, Ratchet, Jolt, Optimus Prime, Ironhide, Bumblebee, Sideswipe and another new Autobot. They can hardly handle the three unknown Transformers but do seem to get the upper hand. The three are forced into a corner (this can be city buildings or hill in the woods.
Then Ratchet says: “I don't understand it Prime, we picked up only one protoform landing here, and they don't look Decepticon to me. Good thing we got them under control.” And then they start to transform and combine into Trypticon! He should be kind of like Devastator, only smaller and maybe have a bit more of a human like form. Nonetheless Trypticon is big, and size does matter when it comes to Transformers. So the Autobots engage him again but get their butts kicked. One Autobot should die here.
Meanwhile Starscream is viewing the battle and corresponding to Megatron. Megatron: “He's just like Devastator, what a good soldier he would be for the Decepticon cause.”
Starscream: “I don't think he'd want to work for us Megatron.”
At the end of the battle Optimus is laying on the floor with Trypticon standing over him. Trypticon scans Optimus and identifies him. Then Trypticon shoots a small strange laser into Optims, then transformers into the three units and escapes.
The Autobots try to help their damaged, Ratchet and jolt do some screentime fixing critical Autobots in need. Then Ratchet comes to Optimus.
Ratchet: “Optimus, glad that thing just flew of, let me have a look at that shoulder of yours.”
Optimus: “I'm fine.”
Ratchet: “Well it doesn't look that way.”
Optimus kind of shouts angry: “I said I'm fine!.”
And gives Ratchet a small elbow push and walks past him. From this point on the viewer know that something has happened to Optimus Prime.
After the battle there's a debriefing with the humans having their concerns again and kind of pointing the fingers at the autobots for luring trouble to our planet.
And a day later there is another attack. The Autobots roll out but Optimus is elsewhere doing business with the humans. The Autobots encounter a black transformer who looks like Optimus Prime. But soon discover that it's not Optimus for he attacks them. Ratchet scans the enemy Transformer and confirms that it's not Optimus. He concludes that it's a Decepticon trick because Starscream and another Decepticon arrive at the scene but aren't attacked by the Black Optimus. So the Autobots consider Black Prime as just some Decepticon playing a sick joke. The battle starts, the Decepticons take backstage at the command of Starscream because he knows Black Prime isn't a Decepticon but he still think that it would be good that Black Prime wears the Autobots down so that he can finish the rest. The battle doesn't go well, he might be a fake Optimus but he is just as strong as Optimus. Starscream and the other Decepticon decide to join in. But then Black Prime goes berserk and attacks everybody. The Decepticons retreat but the Autobots get the upper hand. Black Optimus retreats.
Later on they discuss what they have fought against with Optimus Prime. Prime doesn't know anything but is a bit on edge. He seems fine, not damaged at all.
Then an all Decepticon scene.
Megatron is discussing what has been discovered with Starscream and the other Decepticons on the moon. All of a sudden something is heading their way.
Megatron: “Since when can Autobots fly?”
All of a sudden the signal splits into three signals.
Starscream: “Eh Megatron, I think it's our big friend. Now is your time to give him a job interview.”
Megatron: “Decepticons prepare for battle”
So all the Decepticons engage the three. The battle is kind of more ferocious then normal since Decepticons are real combat Transformers. But still they kind of lose. And again the leader ends up beaten down on the ground with Trypticon in combined form over him. Trypticon scans Megatron and identifies him. But this time he doesn't shoot the weird laser. This is because Megatron isn't a real or true Prime (yet? TF4?).
Trypticon transformers back and leaves the moon. Leaving all Decepticons trashed. The good Decepticon doctor Scalpel has a lot of fixing to do.
Back on Earth.
The Autobots get a message from the Decepticons saying that they want a ceasefire and talk. Megatron and Starscream meet up with Ratchet and Optimus Prime somewhere in the desert.
Megatron: “Optimus Prime... It seems that we have a common enemy. The Transformer that changes into three seperate forms, I believe you have met in battle.”
Optimus Prime: “So it is not a Decepticon.”
Megatron: “No Prime, it is not one of us, but he is extremely dangerous. I suggest we work together to destroy him. This would be in both our best interests.”
Optimus Prime: “This is the first time you've asked me for help Megatron. I agree, the unknown Transformer is to dangerous to keep on this planet. What do you suggest?”
Megatron: “If we combine our strengths and attack him head on. In a non human populated zone of course. We might stand a chance.”
Ratchet: “Permission to speak Optimus.”
Optimus Prime: “Permission granted.”
Ratchet: “I don't think we stand a good chance even if we attack him all together. But I do know a Transformer who might succeed.”
Megatron: “And who do you speak of Autobot?”
Ratchet: “Devastator, He is the biggest and strongest Transformer on Earth.”
Megatron: “The Constructicons are to damaged and can hardly combine thanks to the humans.”
Ratchet: “Maybe we can help? With your permission of course Prime.”
Now here's a tough decision, Optimus has to decide if they help repair a very big foe in order to protect the humans, themselves but also their enemies the Decepticons.
Here we have a situation that I always love about movies, I also think it would be a good story dilemma for the movie.
Optimus Prime thinks, but he agrees to it. The Autobot repair crew and Megatron with his Constructicons arrive at a neutral area and start repairs. Of course there is the usual Autobot – Decepticon dialogue interaction. Autobots would be saying stuff like: “Why do you always have to destroy everything.” And Decepticons would be saying: “Why are you protecting such an inferior race who would rather have you leave their mud ball of a planet.”
At the end of the scene the Constructicons look like new, transform and combine into Devastator. Then the Autobots take a step back and get ready for battle. But Megatron tells Devastator to stand down and that he has a special job for him.
Optimus Prime transforms and leaves without saying anything to his fellow Autbots.
Later on Sam, Mikaela and Bumblebee think that Optimus Prime has been acting a little strange and follow him. Then they end up in an alley. Optimus transforms and doesn't notice them spying on him. Then he feels pain and starts to fall on his knees. Then Sam sees that Optimus Prime slowly becomes black and his eyes red.
He now knows that Black Prime is in fact Optimus Prime and not some Decepticon infiltrator. He radios for the Autobots who hurry up and get there. A battle starts, Optimus can't control himself. Mikaela suggets that they call for Decepticon help but Bumblebee says that the Decepticons would see this as a perfect opportunity to kill Optimus. The battle grows grimmer and Autobots are really starting to get damaged. Then Sam heroically steps in and tells Optimus to calm down. Optimus tries to fight the Darkness but can barely contain the black Chaos.
Optimus Prime: “SSSam, run... save... yourself.”
Optimus Prime: “Ironhide... you know... what to do...”
Ironhide: “Optimus, I can't.”
Optimus Prime opens his chest. Ironhide gets his cannon ready. Then Ratchet steps in and shoots some sort of sonic wave in Optimus' chest and he falls down and turns back to his normal colors.
Ratchet: “He's not offline, he's in stasislock. But he will be for quite some time.”
Sam: “But what about Trypticon and the Decepticons?” (By now they know the name of the big Transformer)
Ironhide: “We'll just have to battle him without Optimus and hope Megatron doesn't find out that our leader isn't fit for battle.“
The following morning Shockwave and Trypticon are standing in the desert.
Shockwave: “Trypticon, the virus has done it's job. The Primes have been taken care of. Now it is time to prepare this planet for assimilation.”
Trypticon: “Feed...”
Trypticon and Shockwave appear in the city and Trypticon starts digging in the ground. Shockwave hangs in the sky waiting for the Autobots.
The Autobots and Decepticons mobilize together and get ready to attack Trypticon.
When they arrive Trypticon transformers into the three and engages his enemies.
Shockwave: “I can't believe my optics, Autobots and Decepticons working together? The world is indeed coming to an end.”
Megatron: “The only thing that is coming to an end is you!”
Shockwave: “Trypticon! Merge and show them who will end!”
Ironhide: “Headsup! Here we go!”
The Autobots and Decepticons attack Trypticon. But can barely keep up.
All of a sudden the Autobots and Decepticons retreat.
Shockwave: “Even with your forces combined, you still don't stand a chance. What makes you think your kind should rule over the universe.”
Megatron: “Enough of this, Constructicons, merge into Devastator!”
The Constructicons step out of the mixed Transformers ranks and transform into Devastator. Now the battle between the two combiners starts right in the middle of the city. A big battle. But it seems that even Devastator has a hard time.
Sam: “You go to help him Bumblebee, he's not going to make it.”
So the others join in but Devastator is clearly the one laying down the big significant punches, the others just bug Trypticon. But eventually they get the upper hand.
Devastator destroys Trypticon with a killing blow but is crippled himself and falls over. Megatron stands up. Shockwave looks up and is kind of worried.
Shockwave: “Impossible! Something is wrong.”
Then he looks at Megatron and scans him.
Shockwave: “You... You are one as well!”
And Shockwave attacks Megatron. Megatron is a bit worn down by the fight with Trypticon and can barely keep up with Shockwave. Megatron does lay down some good attacks to Shockwave but he simply doesn't have the strength anymore to put up a good fight. Megatron falls down in defeat. Right at the moment that Shockwave is going to finish Megatron Optimus arrives at the scene.
Optimus Prime: “Shockwave, I know your plans and I'm here to prevent them.”
Shockwave: “Prime! You're suppose to be different! Very well, I'll finish you myself!”
Then the battle between Prime and Shockwave starts. Prime starts of well since he's recovered from the Black Chaos but Shockwave is a tough customer. When Shockwave is looking like he's going to win Megatron joins the fight. They both defeat Shockwave. Optimus Prime and Megatron are standing over him.
Optimus Prime: “I'm glad he couldn't fulfill his mission.”
Megatron shoots Shockwave dead in the chest.
Megatron: “And he never will.”
Optimus looks a kind of condemning Megatron's action but he knows that Shockwave would continue to try and destroy earth and all Transformers if he were to survive.
Optimus Prime: “So what will you do now?”
Megatron: “There shall be no more fighting today. Decepticons back to base!”
Sam: “He doesn't even say thanks?”
Optimus Prime: “Not fighting us now is his way of saying thank you.”
Sam: “Does this mean the wars over?”
Optimus Prime: “If only that were true.”
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Sorry there isn't a lot of human humor or humans at all in this scenario. The Megatron's origins has been peeked at, he could be a Prime or become one in the later Transformers movies and the character can be deepened more. Great villains are cool, but great villains with some good in their cause are better!. Also no Arcee stuff, they should be in the “chill with the Autobot scenes” where they can explain why they look like female Transformers etc.
Shockwave and Trypticon are generals of Unicron, kind of like Optimus Prime is a guardian of Primus (Cybertron). But the viewers will think that Trypticon is actually the one who's going to “eat” the planet. But that's not the case. It is Unicron. Shockwave and Trypticon have to prepare Earth by putting something in Earth's core that kills all life on the surface. Then the dead planet can be consumed.
At the end of the movie the viewers will think. Trypticon/Shockwave are dead so end of story. But then there is a glimpse of something big that slowly appears in the shadow of Mars. Big as in planet sized big!
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Agreed! 
