Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Hitonoko Mon Apr 04, 2011 1:40 am
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Sailor Destron Tue Apr 05, 2011 3:11 pm
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Hitonoko Tue Apr 05, 2011 11:10 pm
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Fortress Rodimus Wed Apr 06, 2011 10:05 am
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Sailor Destron Thu Apr 07, 2011 6:56 pm
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Hitonoko Fri Apr 08, 2011 12:01 am
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Sailor Destron Sun Apr 10, 2011 4:09 pm
Your story was decent too. I'll be watching to see where you take your story from here!
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Hitonoko Mon Apr 11, 2011 9:06 pm
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Random Tue Apr 12, 2011 11:00 pm
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Sailor Destron Mon Apr 18, 2011 12:34 pm
Hitonoko wrote:The story is only in its developing stages I'll keep up dating it slowly but what I really wanna do is make a pilot episode to present to hasbro or takara and see what they think.
I think this story would make an excellent graphic novel or manga.
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Re: Transformers | Aftermath what happens after Beast Machines
Posted by Lorekeeper Tue Apr 19, 2011 11:27 am
Some constructive criticism:
The script needs an edit to catch really basic grammatical errors.
Waspinator's "voice" in the first part is quite good, why change it so drastically when he upgrades to "Wrath?"
Although as humans, we see the Vok as "skull-faced," such a comparison might not be natural to a Transformer. "Tooth-faced" or such might make more sense.
I have not viewed anything on You-tube, although I might when I'm at home.
I think that this is an excellent resume-builder for you as a creative talent. Although it might never be produced professionally (the big players tend to only use intellectual property they have developed or solicited) it could catapult you to the next level.
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