DecepticonStinger wrote:Well, hello ^^ I'm a bit new to this, so I tried to write two different character-profiles. I don't know which one I should use (or if they would fit here) so I will post them both and hope that they went out good ^^' (and I am not so sure about this... .)
Coldfire
Name: Codlfire (former PileGrace)
Allegiance: Decepticons
Function: Spy, Warrior and Huntress
Alt. mode: B-2 Spirit
Weapons:
Primary Weapon: two assassination wave-blades, hidden in the utter sides of her arms
Secondary Weapon: “Freeze-Fire” Cannon
Special Abilities: Radar (-2); using her charming look and personality to win or avoid a fight (Nontypical offensive and defensive abilities) (-6)
Height: 8,77m – 28,7729659 feet
Quote: “You cannot win with strength alone.” – personal Quote > “Do you like what you see?”
STRENGTH: 04
INTELLIGENCE: 05
DEXTERITY: 07
SPEED: 07
ENDURANCE: 05
COURAGE: 05
FIREPOWER: 05
ACCURACY: 05
MELEE: 09
TECH SKILL: 03
CHARISMA: 07
RANK: Assigned by RPG moderators.
Profile:
Story
Before Coldfire became Decepticon, she was an Autobot Feme known as PileGrace. She was born with a rusty, ugly body. Ashamed of it, she tried to avoid the male Cybertronian everywhere. Learning alongside others was a real pain for her. Some of the other, more beautiful Fembots were laughing about her pitiful construction, which she had to call her body. With no one to rely on she began to break appart in spirit.
When the war reigned over Cybertron, she first was on the side of the Autobots. While fighting against a troup of Decepticons together with some of her Fem-Bot classmates, she got heavily damaged, but yet still wasn’t offline. Her comrades leaved her behind, shoting: “We’ve got no time for this! Leave her or we will end like her.” The Decepticons haven’t recognized her still intact spark, but she had heard every word. The pain was great, but her hate was even stronger.
After three cycles another Decepticon appeared and found her. Her hatred was strong and she only wished to get revenge on them for leaving her behind. She wanted to become Decepticon. She wanted to fight as one, die as one and kill for them, so the Decepticon took her to their basement on Cybertron. There she got inspected by a Decepticon named Shockwave, who said that her body was to damaged then he could repair it into it’s old form. But it was not important. She wanted to fight. Wanted to get her revenge on those Fembots, so she let him build up her old body with many new parts… .
After her reaktivation, she first was not sure what her new body would look like or what she had become. All what Shockwave answered to her was, that he used a picture, that he found in her databank and that she now would be able to fly. PileGrace leaved the basement to go and take her revenge first, before she gets to her new duties. She searched all areas of Cybertron and trained herself in her new flying alternative mode. After a Mega-cycle passed she found the Fembots, which left her behind on the battlefield. They don’t recognized her first untli she revealed herself and crushed them into scrap metal. Inflamed with rage, without any pitty. It was a real gift for her, a pleasure, when she saw their sparks fading away. After some Kliks of watching their discharging bodies, she returned to the basement of the Decepticons. Acording to what Shockwave had told her, Megatron had left Cybertron with his army to give chaze after Optimus Prime. When he tried to say her old name, she stopped his speaking and said that she wanted a new name, that would suit her better. Something that won’t remind her of her old self. Shockwave brought her to a reflecting wall, that showed her mirror image. She could not believe what she saw. Now she understood why the Fembots haven’t recognized her first. She looked totally different from her former self. It was a body, she ever dreamed of. She was beautiful without words. She couldn’t believe it, but she was overjoyed. And then a name crossed her mind. The differences between her new self and her former one, it was like Ice and Fire. Coldfire… .
After some time passed and she habituates her new body, Coldfire started to work as a spy for Shockwave. Loyal to every of his words, she helped him in every way she could. When the spacebridge was build, he sended her down to earth unknown from the enemy and less mentioned to the Decepticons. She got the order to spy at the situations on earth, the search for new energy resources and the technical and militarical advancing of the earth population.
And now she finally got the sign to leave the shadows and to take place in the army on earth. Now she will be treated like any other soldier.
Personality
Coldfire is a gorgeous women, who knows what she wants. She wouldn’t hesitate to say what she’s thinking or to handle things her way. If there is an opportunity, then she will take it. Out of the most female Transformers, Coldfire is a strait thinker. If something is in her way, then it’s going to be sliced, freezed or burned to scrap.
She has a very cold and amused thinking about death, what surely is a leftover from her past. She doesn’t care if someone dies, as long it is not herself. Coldfire shows no mercy or pity for the enemy, especially not for womens.
Unlike other Decepticons, Coldfire has a real joyfull behavior. She loves to teases her comrades. Because she can’t decide which Decepticon would be her most favourite of all, she likes to test them, by playing harmless jokes or watching them.
Coldfire likes to be around men as much as she hates other womens (no matter if Transformer or human). Shockwave is the one she respected the most of all Decepticons. Strong men in strength equal like in willpower and determination are her favourites, but she also likes some sense of humor, too. What Coldfire dislikes are weaklings and males, who try to treat her like some ordinary girl.
Abilities:
Her body may look really heavy in robot mode, because of the wings that sit on her shoulders like a gigantic coat, but it’s all light materials so she can move and attack faster. She can reach a speed of mach 1 to mach 1.9 and is fast and really silent while in robot mode. Sneaking and spying are some of her special abilities, which she improved while working for Shockwave on Cybertron.
Coldfire is a good near combat fighter, even with less strength then other Decepticons. She uses her blades like suprisingly outcoming weapons, which aren’t easy to spot at first view. Able to throw this blade like boomrangs or to use them like sharp forceps makes her moves really unexpecting. Coldfire uses her fast moves for difficult movements, which looks more like a kind of dance then real combat attacks.
Coldfire also uses a pair of “Freeze-Fire” cannons. She can modify her ammunition into Ice or Fire. The bullets and rockets will get covered in the explained elements and get their abilities. Covered in Ice, they can freeze foes by contact (normal bullets) or turning an specific area in a diameter of 1 km into ice (rockets). Covered in fire, they can burn themselves through strong walls (normal bullets) or engulf an entire area of 1 km diameter with a flaming inferno (rockets). Most time she uses the normal bullets for combat and the rockets only for taking an adventage while escaping.
This Decepticon Feme got herself a B-2 Spirit as alternative Mode. While flying in this Mode, she don’t struggles against the wind. She uses the wind. Gliding over it and don’t speed up against it. Since she was spying on the earth people, she learned to use their surrounding nature for herself.
Coldfire has a really charming nature. Since her old body was gone forever, she now could live like she really was. Coldfire loves to use her female assets to avoid or win a fight more easier, but also just to see who would be strong enough to withstand it.
Coldfire is a loyal Decepticon, even if she sometimes don’t seems that way. Her hatred for the Autobot fraction is still burning, even after her revenge. That’s make her loyal to her fraction, but more loyal to Shockwave, who rebuilted her body, no matter how hard she would get treatened in the army.
Weaknesses:
Coldfire hates Fembots. Her hatred can somehow be a cause of problems. She hates to get insulted by other girls or even to get reminded on her time as PileGrace, if someone would recognize her.
She suffered long and no one seemed to care about it. All the pain. All the suffering is encaged in the name PileGrace. She hates that name. She hates to think or hear of it. She tried to forget it all. If someone would remind her of this, she would try to shut him or her up by slicing his head off.
She's not very strong and sometimes her strait way of thinking can get her into much trouble. And even her charming perosnality could not help her much then.
Sample Post:
She stand on the debris of the houses. Covered in the upcoming streams of reek. “So? You’re still wandering around the sideways of Cybertron, trying to show your stuff to the Decepticons, do you?” The three Fembots raised their weapons up. One comes closer and shouted at her. “Who do you think you are, lady?! Some kind of sweet doll for Megatron and his rust heads?” “You… .”, she answered with questions, “You don’t remember me? You don’t remember the body you have ashamed with joy?! The body you have left behind to rescue your own?! How dare you!!” PileGraze jumps out of the smoke. A Feme approached the three ladies with grace beyond words. Black and grey metal with the fading gleam of dark violet. A wonderful thin body with a wing coat on her shoulders. Two long, steel-like whipes rushing down her back, from the head to the hip. The red optics are starring at them with anger. “You dare to forget me?! But I never forgotten what you have done to me! What suffering I had to sustain… . You have no idea!” , a fainted smile crossed her lips, “But soon… . Soon you will… .” The leader of the three womens got scared and backed off. “You… you’re.…!” But before she could end her sentence, a bullet slashed through her chest and she felt down. PileGrace comes forward and stood her feet on her head. “You…left me… . They…rebuilt me… . And now…I will destroy you… .”
Raybolt
Name: Raybolt
Allegiance: Autobots
Function: former communication assistent
Alt. mode: Jaguar XKR –colouring red
Weapons:
Primary Weapon: simple laser gun
Secondary Weapon: sound- and air - wave impacts sent out over the antennaes at the audio-sensores
Special Abilities: Low fuel consumption (-4) ; Above average sensory – audio (he can hear “sparks sing” (don’t know where to put this in)) (-7)
Height: 25 feet – 7,62m
Quote: “Be friendly and you luck will be on your side."
STRENGTH: 03
INTELLIGENCE: 05
DEXTERITY: 05
SPEED: 09
ENDURANCE: 08
COURAGE: 03
FIREPOWER: 05
ACCURACY: 07
MELEE: 02
TECH SKILL: 06
CHARISMA: 06 (but very shy)
RANK: Assigned by RPG moderators.
Profile:
Raybolt is a very young Bot on the go, but only how he remembers it. Because of an attack by Decepticon Forces his headprozessor got really bad damaged. To rescue him, some Autobots repaired him and had given Raybolt a new one, which contains the remaining data’s of the destroyed one. That’s why most of his memories are gone forever. And this is, how everything was happening.
2 Meta-Cycles before war engulfed Cybertron completely, Raybolt was working as mere communication assistant in the communication central of cybertron. Showing great potential and interests in mashines and audio-signations, he got quite a lot of experience at using sound waves for finding stuff. First it was only some kind of hobby to this Protoform, but with time passing and conflicts raging, he kinda used it for fleeing and hiding from the enemy.
When the war was at his top on Cybertron, Raybolt and one of his comrades were trying to find Prime. They went through the underground of Cybertron, to prevent to get spotted by Decepticons. But a little group of them catched up with the two and hunted them down to Tyger Pax. Raybolt’s friend was shot, when they tried to flee out of the underground. Raybolt escaped successfully from the chazing Decepticon group.
Fear dragged him down, so Raybolt hides for a long time, using his special ability to avoid nearby Decepticon squads. But someday his luck ended. Decepticons spotted him wandering around an empty bridgeway. They attacked without warning and he got a shot right through the left side of his head, making him fall down the bridge into a mountain of rubble. He thought it was his end and lost conscious. But a little group of Autobots found him and brought his damaged body to their hideout. It tooks them one Mega-cycle to repair his broken parts and another one for him to awake again. Because of the major damage of his headprozessor, he lost most of his memories and not even knows what kind of fraction he was in or what a fraction was. After another attack of the Decepticon, he was again the only survivor and got trapped in a sideway. With the Decepticons drawing near and their laugher in his audio-sensores, he started to drown in his own fear. At the one moment, when one of the Decepticon soldiers stand right in front of him, his fear was so strong, that it activated some kind of weapon in his head. Raybolt’s optics turned bright white and some kind of screeching sound wave crumbles over the air. The wave gathered in the sideway and in one astrosecond, the waves clashed out in front of them like an impact and smashed them over the street. Raybolt himself got a blackout. Not understanding what really had happened right now, he just took the opertunity and stoles a laser gun from one of the Decepticon and apologized to them.
After escaping again he saw the Arc-19 leaving Cybertron and another ship following it. Something in his sparks gives him the feeling to give chaze to the two shuttles. Raybolt searched the area around the start platforms of the Arc-19 and found another, smaller space-ship. With little hasitation he entered it and tried to activate it and he successed. The ship followed them into the wormhole but was released near the planet Uranus. The travel was rough so the little guy lost conscious. With the little speed he got closer to Earth and ended up crashing southwest of the Cibola National Forest, east of Gutierrezville. After awakening inside his shuttle, Raybolt crawls out of it and began to investigate the whole strange area around him. Every step with fear of being spotted by the Decepticons, but with the hope to meet other Autobots as well.
Personality
Raybolt is a very shy, nice and gentle Transformer and a hard worker. He tries his best to overcome his timid nature. Because of this shyness, he doesn’t open up to others quick, but if he knows that he can trust a person, he would do everything for to help him or her. But this also goes for the enemy. Raybolt doesn’t understand why Autobots and Decepticons must be at war. For him they are all Cybertronian people. He see’s no difference between the two fractions, what makes him to trustful to the enemy.
Raybolt lost much of his older memories. He doesn’t even knows where he lived before working at the communication central. But he still knows a lot about mashines, sound- and radiowaves. His inquistiveness in this categories is of good help for him.
He may not talk much, but he can listen to others even better. He likes to hear stories from others so he could remember what Cybertron was before war. Not knowing anything about his homeland, he really is ashamed of it.
Raybolt is a very nice and gentle Autobot. He knows how to adress older Cybertronian and what he should do and what not. He also apologizes often. Even if he knocks off a Decepticon attacker, he would apologize for hurting him. It’s something he can’t give up. He likes to be that way. It makes him feel better.
Abilities:
Raybolt isn’t usually using his laser gun much often, but is really skilled in attacking from greater distance. Even with such a little and not very strong fire-weapon, he can do some real strong damages. With his provident thinking, he tries to avoid using much energy and ammunition.
Another weapon is somehow bound to his feelings. It’s a device in his head that is connected with his audio-sensores. It activates when Raybolt’s emotions are reaching a high level. The young Bot don’t know where it comes from or how it exactly works, though. The first time it was activated, when Raybolt was cornered in the Sideway by a Decepticon troup. When it begans to work, it drags the air toward the users body. The air twirls around the antennaes, what looks like it would heat up, and create a large amoung of metalic screeches, that let glassware break in great ranges. After the soundwaves are reaching a high frequenze, the air gots send out like a strong impact and drives everything in it’s reach away. The cruising radius is not much far from the user away (about 15m), but the power of the impact is strong (like 10,8 to 18,2 tons)
Raybolt is a fast Autobot. For him, retreat is one of the most options in war, so he knows how to get away from the enemy. But he can put his speed to another use, too. He can follow even the most fast foes without losing sight of them. In his alternative Mode, Raybolt can reach speeds from 300 mph to 500 mph. He can drive nearly 3 weeks without getting tanked.
Another ability is his strong endurance. Raybolt’s way of surviving much dangerous situations would be called “more luck then judgement” in human ways. He tries to avoid much danger and then trips in it without warning, but somehow got out of it luckily. He also can withstand much damaging and tortures. Even if the pain is really strong. Raybolt bears lots of willpower, which gives him the strength to overcome all the terror around him.
Before war he worked as an assistant of communication at the communication central of Cybertron. There he got his interest in sound waves and first got the experience of hearing “sparks sing”. The Cybertronians that worked with him were all inspired by his appreciable work and gentle nature. He tried hard to accomplish difficult tasks and doing a good job, by thinking logical and finding answers in his surroundings, not only in existing data-files. His interests in great mashines and sounds let him become a weird mix of a mechanic. He loved to build useless stuff, that just played or created sounds, but doesn’t do anything else.
While working in the central, Raybolt began to hear strange melodies from all around him. The first time he thought that he would imagened it, but when it started to show off everytime, he finally belived that this sounds were real. Without knowing what this could be, he investigated them and found out, that they were coming from sparks. He does not know why sparks make such sounds or why he seems to be the only one hearing it, so he gave up on searching for answers to his many questions, because his work would have suffered of it. The only things he knowed till this point was, that the sounds are somehow connected to the feeling of one Cybertronian. So he began to cataloguize the different melodies into three primary and two secondary parts, so he could tell them appart. The primary categories are “good”, “impartial” and “evil”. The secondary categories are “light” and “dark”. He began to understand, that the sounds he heared were somehow bound to their emotions. Raybolt was able to describe the feeling of another one, by listening to the melody that surrounds his spark. He used that ability to avoid Decepticon troups on Cybertron, while he was on his escape.
Weaknesses:
Raybolt is very shy toward new people. His somewhat timid nature makes it difficult for him to do what he really wants to: -helping others-. Because of his timidity, he easy got scared and he has no trust in things he don’t know. He even makes many simple failures at his work, but tries to overcome it.
Raybolt is a very gentle and friendly Cybertronian, who can’t just hate anyone, because of his actions. Even if the one is Decepticon. Raybolt is friendly and honest to everybody. To tell lies is something, he feels as wrong. It is something he wouldn’t do, even if it could safe his own spark. But he also wouldn’t lie if a Decepticon would get him with kindness to tell him about the Autobots.
One thing is a great obstacle for him and maybe for his fraction too. He is very afrait of war. He hates it and wants to end it somehow quick without destroying to much other existence. He knows that it makes him a real drag for his comrades, but in his optics they are all Cybertronian people. He couldn’t think otherwise of it… .
Sample Post:
Kneeling on the outskirt of the battle, not looking for the foe, but for the combat itself, Raybolt was shacking in every part of his body. He don’t even recognized the Autobot soldier, who protected him from an enemy. Not even hears his shoutings. “Why…?” , his voice crumbled with fear. He couldn’t understand it, “Why do they do that? Please….stop them… . Why… ? Why is there no one who stop them? Please! Make it stop!!”
The little guy looks around the circle of Autobots, which surrounded him now. He was pretty nervous and started to tap his fingers together. “Uh… . Well… .” He begin to scratch over his mouth-protector-plate kinda embarrassed. “P…pl…please… . C…could you stop….staring at me like ...t…that… . I…it…it’s… making…me….n…nervous… .” He looked around him again. His servos were trembling like an aspen leaf. “W…well… . Uh… .. . M…my n..name is Raybolt… . I… it’s nice…t…to meet you…all… .”
Raybolt crouched under Thundercrackers attack. After the dust and smoke was gone, he jumps up and shots back. Thundercracker was hit at his wing and was falling into the near lake. The little red Bot was shocked and shouted toward him. "Sorry about that! I hope you're not hurt, Sir!" Then he rushed to Bumblebee and the other Autobots with a gleam of fear in his spark. "I...I can do it!" , he mumbled, "I...I won't back off now!"
I hope I made it right >_<'
Well the major problem with these profiles is the incompatible history with the game setting. You seem to be using a cartoon based history when the game is more akin to the IDW comic history. You should study the game history and notes threads and take that into account before applying for any more characters. Also running the profiles through a spelling and grammar checker would help. As they are now these profiles are incompatible with the game and can't be accepted.