Ok, i did some adjusting according to your instructions...though i thought the max stat pts for fanmade characters was 75? anyway, i only upped the melee by 1 just in case and adjusted the writing sample to more fit the melee stat. i also highligted the writing sample changes to quicker review
Name: Huvrr
Allegiance: autobot
Function: warrior
Alternate Mode: Cybertronian Jet
Pic Link:
http://www.shipschematics.net/yamato/im ... erstar.jpg Weapons: dual pulse canons; Wing blades; Incendary rockets (x4 vehicle mode)
Special Abilities: Radar system
Height: 26 Feet / 7.92 Meters
Motto: "The only good Decepticon is a fragged one!"
Tech Specs
Strength: 5
Intelligence: 5
Dexterity: 8
Speed: 7
Endurance: 6
Courage: 8
Firepower: 5
Accuracy: 6
Melee:
7 Tech Skill: 6
Charisma:5
Rank: 4
Appearance:
Huvrr recently acquired a new form; that of a Cybertronian Jet. His coloring was changed to black and his secondary color to a dark purple to blend in better and keep with the shadows. His optic color has been changed to purple and is now a single visor instead of 2 optic units. The rest of his helmet is black and a black mouth plate instead of an actual mouth. The new coloring has made him appear more like the decepticon skywarp than some bots would like while his new head unit gives off more of a decepticon feel which leaves most bots a little uncomfortable around him. During transformation his cockpit folds down in his front to provide chest and abdomen armor. His arms fold out from his fuselage and his legs extend out from the rear of the starfighter, with his afterburners slightly modifying to serve as feet. In robot mode the front of his wings that connected to his cockpit area stay up to either side of his head appearing as sharp blades coming off his back. His wings swivel upwards showing 2 sharp blades sloping towards his body from the back. These same wings detach to act as blades for melee combat.
Profile:
Formerly a scout, he lost his original form after an intense battle
fighting alongside the Wreckers. During repairs and mandatory CR chamber time his form was altered to compensate for his injuries. After awaking he became a colder and more deadly bot. Noticing the change he altered his coloring to reflect what he felt was the new him.
With his new body came a new alt mode...that of a cybertronian jet.After his close call with death he decided that to end the decepticons was all that mattered. No longer caring how that goal came about, he became more brutal and began studying melee combat and close in weapons combat. He had his wings modified to be able to detach from his back and act as blades to better suit his new self imposed purpose. While seemingly cold and detached he still cares for his fellow Autobots deeply and feels the only way to protect them from the danger is to take it upon himself to see that the threats to their peace are eliminated. Some have claimed he has become more like the decepticons he hates, but he feels it doesn't matter as long as the job gets done.
Abilities:
Huvrr is still good at detecting security systems and bypassing them but has lost his former stealth abilities due to his form change. He is equipped with highly sensitive radar device able to detect enemy combatants up to a 5 mile radius. His new jet mode has provided an increase in speed(approx.mach 1.5) with a top out of 1140 mph, while his new targeting system and weapons make him more of a threat during battle. Though only recently aquiring his new form and weapons he has taken right to them and seems to have improved by leaps and bounds in his accuracy. The study he has put into melee combat and the training with his new blades has made him a match for most close quarter combat units, with the exception of the most skilled specialist. His blades can cut through the armor of most light to moderatly amored transformers and with a little time and precision even hack the most heavily armored down to size. His top mounted dual pulse cannons can detach while in robot mode and act as his main ranged weapon while in this mode. His incendary rockets are capable of melting most regular ground units down to size, while making sure the more heavily armored units knew he was there. His colder and deadlier mentality has made him a force on the battle field making up for what experience he lacks with sheer enthusiasm and determination.
Weaknesses:
His lack of battle experience still leaves him vulnerable at times to attacks that most veteran Autobot warriors would know to watch for. His new found enthusiasm and determination has also blinded him in battle sometimes making him attack larger or more experienced enemy units that most would normally avoid. Seeing him attack a combiner or unit commander alone is no odd occurance anymore and could lead to a trip to the frag pile should his zealousness get the best of him. Through all this his care for his fellow Autobots has only increased and he will cease combat in an instant to attend to or rescue a fallen comrade or one in dire trouble. This leaves him vulnerable and may one day prove to be his undoing.
Sample Writing:
The world suddenly exploded, bursting into flames in fron the the decepticon sentries standing guard outside the weapons factory. Pulse blast rained down as the guards not effected by the initial assault found their targets and set to attack. The Autobot ground units charged ahead into the returning fire determined to end the fight as quick as possible and shutdown part of their enemies weapons supply.
Above Huvrr came about for a return run firing a second incendary rocket to soften the enemy units up before his comrades got to them. He let out a quick burst of fire as he zeroed in on one enemy unit and dived directly at it. Forty feet from the decepticon he transformed,
pulling out one of his wing blades and then coming down, embeding the blade in the enemy unit's chest, straight up to the hilt. Standing up from his crouch he reached over his shoulder, removing his dual pulse cannon and let out a quick volley at the nearest combatants, while pulling his sword out of the deactivated decepticon. A quick thrust of his blade sliced into the abdomen of an attacking decepticon, disabling it, leaving it screaming in pain and him free to sprint towards the facilities outer wall and scan for any additional threats. With all the perimeter guards out of comission, Prowl,the operations commander sprinted up next to Huvrr. "Did a death wish come with that new frame?", he asked.
Huvrr coldly responded, "Prowl, if i wanted your opinion i would have given it too you."
"Keep it up smartbot. Pull that crap again and you'll be arranging data files till you
rust out."
Huvrr hated having to deal with operation commanders like Prowl. The kind that had to chime in on any little thing you did, right down to if you they thought you held your weapon too tight. He took a quick radar scan of the entry to the weapons facility, found the placement and size of the other enemy guards and then looked back at Prowl. "If you want to sit here and burn out your voice circuit thats fine. Me....I have a job to do!"
With that he rounded the corner and charged in through the entrance way, spraying the room with suppression fire. Begrudgingly Prowl called out "Frag you Huvrr!" charging after him and leading the small taskforce into the building. Slaming down next to Huvrr who was taking cover behind a doorframe Prowl said, "After this is all done, me, you and Prime are having a little talk." "Fine", Huvrr responded, "Now shut yapping and start shooting!"
The Autobot taskforce had the last remaining guards pinned down in a side room with only one entry and exit point. One of the younger taskforce members said "frag it, i'm tossing a photon grenade."
"Are your fraging circuits fried?!", Huvrr responded.
"Huvrr, enough! Sprint, give me that fragin grenade. Ok, here's the plan. First.." Prowl was saying as Huvrr popped up and charged around the corner, letting out a brief
"Prowl, cover me!"
"Stupid bot has a deathwish" Prowl mumbled. "Give him some cover fire!! I want enough of him left for me and Prime after this mission!"
Huvrr registered the last part of that order as he charged down the short hallway and dived over the make shift barricade the guards had sat, rolling and coming up with his blades swinging swiftly and furiously. He deflected a bolt away towards a wall where it bounced off hitting one of the guards in the head, leaving a whole clean through.
A back swing from his left hand blade tripped another, while he thrust his second blade at the guards chest in front of him, scratching its chest as it turned to evade the attack. A blast smacked full force into his back before he could finish the guard off, driving him into the wall ahead and then falling hard to the ground. Twisting he saw the three guards coming to try and finish him off when a laser blast rang out, bursting the middle guards right optic unit and leaving a hole clean through. Two bots ran in fragging the last two guards and giving a little chuckle at Huvrr's predicament. Picking himself up off the ground he dusted himself off, all the while staring straight at Prowl.
"Thanks, I owe ya." "Save it", Prowl responded, "You're not going to be too thankful when we get back to base. After Optimus hears about this, you'll be stuck on monitor duty until the galaxy implodes." "You two", Prowl said pointing to a couple of the soldiers,"go set the charges and lets get the slag out of here."
With the charges set the bots made their way outside, taking cover and detonating the explosives. "Okay Autobots, lets..." before Prowl could finish, Huvrr transformed and took off back to base. Let him go cry to Prime he though to himself. The job is done and thats all that matters. With that final thought he kicked up his speed and rocketed off towards base to hit the CR chamber and get some well deserved rest.