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thanks tam i thought youd like that part, and it took me 15 min of serching for your bots color

just aslong as you get the personality right.

Tammuz wrote:just aslong as you get the personality right.

was i close (i never read your bio dont kill me and expect a little more before tonights over

just read the bio, it'll save a lot of hassle later...

are u ok with the way i portraied him or do you have a character thet resembles this ones attitude

the thing is, thats not really my call, you're the one asking for characters, you either need to write a story around the character's you've chosen to use, or you write the story and use characters who fit into it

either way you need to know your characters inside out, especially if they're not "you're" characters but someone else's, you can't right the the ineptibots as a competant team in a serious toned fic, and also need to know what the story is going to be about, and how it will play out. there is no point shoe-horning a character into a story if he has no place in it, if a character doesn't fit with you're story then you either need to drop the character, or change the story.

and it's hard to say whether you've portrayed my character corrcectly since you've given him three lines, but you would know if you'd read his bio.

though i do have one question, at the end of the first part wheelie's flying to darkmount, and in the second part the metting seems rather clandestine, why would any RDD member be so secretive in their own lair?

there meeting in a an autobot part of moon 2

Tammuz wrote:you can't right the the ineptibots as a competant team in a serious toned fic,

HMW : Shattered Glass.

Where Autobots turn up in missions, steve posts paragraphs larger than anything P_____R could ever dream up, and the Ineptibots don't shoot their own feet off.

Burn wrote:

Tammuz wrote:you can't right the the ineptibots as a competant team in a serious toned fic,

HMW : Shattered Glass.

Where Autobots turn up in missions, steve posts paragraphs larger than anything P_____R could ever dream up, and the Ineptibots don't shoot their own feet off.

Okay dude, here's some helpful advice so you can shed this n00b status.

First of all, responses with only smilies? Not good. You quoted me with a smiley and I have absolutely no idea what you mean by it. Pissed off? Agree? In different? Hard to tell.

Now, your story. Now this is entirely my opinion and you don't have to listen to it at all. Breaking it up into "parts" like you're doing, well the parts are a little short. I can read them in 30 seconds. If you're going to post a part once every couple of days then I'm going to lose interest quickly, and I'm sure I won't be the only one. So maybe try to put more into each part, enough to capture the attention of the reader but also leave them hanging for more.

Tammuz also gave you a very important piece of advice and that's to read the bios of the characters you've been given and understand those characters and write to suit those characters. Ignoring the bios is a slap in the face to the creators of them.

Keep going dude, and just remember to enjoy what you're writing!

Burn wrote:

Tammuz wrote:you can't right the the ineptibots as a competant team in a serious toned fic,

HMW : Shattered Glass.

Where Autobots turn up in missions, steve posts paragraphs larger than anything P_____R could ever dream up, and the Ineptibots don't shoot their own feet off.

I miss PR. So much it hurts.

*enters and looks around*

Need 'cons? Got eleven of them in my HMW team. Link's in my sig.

Just remember to take Tammuz's advice (looking at bios) and we'll all be happy...

...hopefully.