The Energon Pub

Name: Razatron

Allegiance: Decepticon

Function: Mercinary

Alt. mode: Blue and White F16 Eagle

Weapons: Null Ray Rifle, and Flak Rifle

Special Abilities: Able to fly in robot mode

Height: 35 ft. 10.668 meters.

Quote: "The enemy of my enemy is my friend"

STRENGTH: 6
INTELLIGENCE: 8
DEXTERITY: 5
SPEED: 9
ENDURANCE: 8
COURAGE: 8
FIREPOWER: 6
ACCURACY: 8
MELEE: 4
TECH SKILL: 5
CHARISMA: 7
RANK:

Profile: He was originally created to protect the Senators, but when the war started he sympathized with and join the Decepticons. After years of fighting and not gaining any profit, he quit the Decepticons and left Cybertron to fight for someone else in their wars. After the Autobots and Decepticons started to inflitrate Earth he then started to slowly make an attempt to rejoin the Decepticons

In secret he hopes to find Vector Sigma, or the All Spark and use them to create an army of robots that he could use to overthrow Megatron and Optimus Prime.

Abilities: He is capable of going mach 3 in his alternate mode. He can blast holes into his opponents with his Flak Rifle, and can temporarily short out equipment with his Null Ray Rifle for a maximum of ten minutes. He has the ability to fly while in his bot mode. His alternate mode is a Blue and White F 16.

Weaknesses: He has a tendency to be arrogant, and there for thinks that he should be the leader of the Decepticons, he has been fortunate to be able to keep this information from their current leader. He has a physical weakness that when he is in a fight he is more likely to lose when they blast him in the knees, and neck.

Sample Post:
Arrival 0100 Hours(1:00 AM)

The last of the air patrols are going back to base. He doesn't want any one to see him in is bot mode, so he scans one of the flying jets and takes its form. When he landed he then started to pretend to be a regular fighter jet.

After he had been hidden for 6 years, he started to receive transmissions from others like himself. He then decided to make a request to rejoin the Decepticons. After being accepted back he then went mobile and started to try and make energon for himself, in areas, where humans are not likely to be.

He is trying to get enough energy and parts to make a ship, and try to leave this mud ball they call a planet. He how ever has not been able to get the parts, so he might as well cause havoc for some of the Autobots that are here while he waits.

nikeprime wrote:"Blade"

Allegiance: Autobots
Function: special ops/spy/warrior
Alt. mode: Nissan 300z
Weapons: Energy katana, Laser blaster
Special Abilities: cloaking device
Height: 24 feet
Quote: "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom."

Strength: 04
Intelligence: 07
Dexterity: 08
Speed: 08
Endurance: 05
Courage: 07
Firepower: 05
Accuracy: 07
Melee: 08
Tech Skill: 04
Charisma: 07
Rank:

Profile: Blade knows he isn't the biggest or strongest Autobot, but what he lacks in size he makes up for with shear speed and technique. He has trained in lost Cybertronian ways of combat, and his energy blades can slice through even the thickest of Decepticon armor.

Abilities: Blade relies on his speed, combat dexterity and precision to get the job done. His movements are so fast they sometimes look like a blur on the battlefield. He is a specialist at gaining information behind the battle lines, using his cloaking device and skill to go unnoticed even in the most dangerous of areas.


Weaknesses: His size, while giving him several advantages, also makes him vunerable to more powerful attacks.

Sample post:
Back on Cybertron, the starlight softly reflects off a a dark surface, scared by years of warfare. A lone figure quickly approaches from the distance, quickly moving in and out of cover, with a look of determination on his rigid face.

He was told his mission was suicide, that no Autobot could go so deep into Decepticon territory unnoticed, but he is no normal Autobot. His name in Blades, and he is a dying breed, trained in the arts of stealth, he knows no fear. As he comes upon a Decepticon prison camp, he smirks, engages his cloaking suit and says to himself "This is what I live for".

Blade quickly approaches the prison camp, searching for his friend Bumble Bee who was captured a few nights earlier. The air smells of burning rubber and hot metal, the corpses of dead Autobots litter the area. Using his sensors, he scans the area and sure enough picks up on Bee's energy signature. He knows this task won't be easy, for he is outnumbered 6 to 1 by Decepticon drone soilders. Quickly he strikes the two drones guarding Bee's holding cell, decapitating both with one fell swoop. He carefully downloads the holding cell codes from one of the dead soilder's cortex, and releases his weakened, but still alive friend. As they sneak away into the darkness, Bee asks "What took you so long". Blade dosen't comment, he just smirks.

Multiple functions are generally not allowed. Special ops I think covers everything you want to do with this character.

A cloaking device has a stat penalty of at least 6 and up to 12 depending on how effective it is. You didn't take any stat penalty for it.

I'd like to see more talk of his personality in the profile section. Save the abilities for that section. Also he can't move fast enough to appear as a blur in battle. Something that extreme would be some sort of special ability.

Name:Swoop

Function:Bombardier

Alliance:Autobot

Quote:"Fear can hit targets
unreachable by bullets."

Alt.Mode:Pteranodon

Weapon/s:2X Wing mounted missile launchers,Thermal Sword

Strength:6
Intelligence:6
Courage:7
Dexterity:7
Speed:8
Endurance:9
Firepower:7
Accuracy:6
Melee:8
Rank:5
Tech Skills:7

Bio:
Swoop is the most affable of the Dinobots and often acts as their liaison to the other Autobots. Even though he's able to get along
with them better than the rest of the Dinobots,he still agrees with
his comrades belief that Optimus Prime is an ineffective leader.
Some Autobots are put off by his fearsome dinosaur mode and his loyalty to his team,both of which disguise's his out-of-place kindness and good natured personality. This secretly makes swoop sad, but this sorrow is outweighed by his dedication to the Dinobot squad and their goals. Swoop has managed to turn his grotesque form into an advantage on the battlefield, where he has become an expert at using his diving attacks and disconcerting battle cries to confuse and scatter his terrified decepticon targets.

Weakness:
Swoops wings are quite thin and weakly armored making them susceptible to artillery fire

Sample Post:
"Swoop""Grimlock""Snarl""Slag""Sludge"said Wheeljack "Optimus these five are a new squad of 'bots you requested I suggest calling them dinobots""thank you wheeljack i look forward to seeing them in action"said Optimus Prime.
later that day
"raghhhhh"""raorrrrrrr"""grahhhhhhhhh""brawhhhhhhhhh""sgrahhhhhhh"
"prime we got a situation out ere"

Razatron wrote:Name: Razatron

Allegiance: Decepticon

Function: Mercinary

Alt. mode: Blue and White F16 Eagle

Weapons: Null Ray Rifle, and Flak Rifle

Special Abilities: Able to fly in robot mode

Height: 35 ft. 10.668 meters.

Quote: "The enemy of my enemy is my friend"

STRENGTH: 6
INTELLIGENCE: 8
DEXTERITY: 5
SPEED: 9
ENDURANCE: 8
COURAGE: 8
FIREPOWER: 6
ACCURACY: 8
MELEE: 4
TECH SKILL: 5
CHARISMA: 7
RANK:

Profile: He was originally created to protect the Senators, but when the war started he sympathized with and join the Decepticons. After years of fighting and not gaining any profit, he quit the Decepticons and left Cybertron to fight for someone else in their wars. After the Autobots and Decepticons started to inflitrate Earth he then started to slowly make an attempt to rejoin the Decepticons

In secret he hopes to find Vector Sigma, or the All Spark and use them to create an army of robots that he could use to overthrow Megatron and Optimus Prime.

Abilities: He is capable of going mach 3 in his alternate mode. He can blast holes into his opponents with his Flak Rifle, and can temporarily short out equipment with his Null Ray Rifle for a maximum of ten minutes. He has the ability to fly while in his bot mode. His alternate mode is a Blue and White F 16.

Weaknesses: He has a tendency to be arrogant, and there for thinks that he should be the leader of the Decepticons, he has been fortunate to be able to keep this information from their current leader. He has a physical weakness that when he is in a fight he is more likely to lose when they blast him in the knees, and neck.

Sample Post:
Arrival 0100 Hours(1:00 AM)

The last of the air patrols are going back to base. He doesn't want any one to see him in is bot mode, so he scans one of the flying jets and takes its form. When he landed he then started to pretend to be a regular fighter jet.

After he had been hidden for 6 years, he started to receive transmissions from others like himself. He then decided to make a request to rejoin the Decepticons. After being accepted back he then went mobile and started to try and make energon for himself, in areas, where humans are not likely to be.

He is trying to get enough energy and parts to make a ship, and try to leave this mud ball they call a planet. He how ever has not been able to get the parts, so he might as well cause havoc for some of the Autobots that are here while he waits.

You still haven't made all the changes I asked you to do before. You also haven't described his personality at all.

metalspark wrote:Name:Swoop

Function:Bombardier

Alliance:Autobot

Quote:"Fear can hit targets
unreachable by bullets."

Alt.Mode:Pteranodon

Weapon/s:2X Wing mounted missile launchers,Thermal Sword

Strength:6
Intelligence:6
Courage:7
Dexterity:7
Speed:8
Endurance:9
Firepower:7
Accuracy:6
Melee:8
Rank:5
Tech Skills:7

Bio:
Swoop is the most affable of the Dinobots and often acts as their liaison to the other Autobots. Even though he's able to get along
with them better than the rest of the Dinobots,he still agrees with
his comrades belief that Optimus Prime is an ineffective leader.
Some Autobots are put off by his fearsome dinosaur mode and his loyalty to his team,both of which disguise's his out-of-place kindness and good natured personality. This secretly makes swoop sad, but this sorrow is outweighed by his dedication to the Dinobot squad and their goals. Swoop has managed to turn his grotesque form into an advantage on the battlefield, where he has become an expert at using his diving attacks and disconcerting battle cries to confuse and scatter his terrified decepticon targets.

Weakness:
Swoops wings are quite thin and weakly armored making them susceptible to artillery fire

Sample Post:
"Swoop""Grimlock""Snarl""Slag""Sludge"said Wheeljack "Optimus these five are a new squad of 'bots you requested I suggest calling them dinobots""thank you wheeljack i look forward to seeing them in action"said Optimus Prime.
later that day
"raghhhhh"""raorrrrrrr"""grahhhhhhhhh""brawhhhhhhhhh""sgrahhhhhhh"
"prime we got a situation out ere"

You skipped the abilities section and your sample post is rubbish. You need to try a lot harder and not just slap something up.

Name:Swoop

Function:Bombardier

Alliance:Autobot

Quote:"Fear can hit targets
unreachable by bullets."

Alt.Mode:Pteranodon

Weapon/s:2X Wing mounted missile launchers,Thermal Sword

Strength:6
Intelligence:6
Courage:7
Dexterity:7
Speed:8
Endurance:9
Firepower:7
Accuracy:6
Melee:8
Rank:5
Tech Skills:7

Bio:
Swoop is the most affable of the Dinobots and often acts as their liaison to the other Autobots. Even though he's able to get along
with them better than the rest of the Dinobots,he still agrees with
his comrades belief that Optimus Prime is an ineffective leader.
Some Autobots are put off by his fearsome dinosaur mode and his loyalty to his team,both of which disguise's his out-of-place kindness and good natured personality. This secretly makes swoop sad, but this sorrow is outweighed by his dedication to the Dinobot squad and their goals. Swoop has managed to turn his grotesque form into an advantage on the battlefield, where he has become an expert at using his diving attacks and disconcerting battle cries to confuse and scatter his terrified decepticon targets.

Abilities:
Swoop may have above average strength but he is still the weakest Dinobot.In pteranadon mode ho can fly at speeds of 250 miles per hour
for 700 miles at a time.He is a top-notch flyer and his maneuverability is awesome. He has two wing mounted missile launchers
with air-to-air and air-to-ground capabilities. Each missile has a blast force equivalent of 5000lbs.of TNT,and they are accurate at ranges up to 8miles away. He can also use them in robot mode, as well as a thermal sword that heats up to 4000 centigrade and is capable of slicing through most decepticon armour plating. Swoop is highly fuel-efficient.
Weakness:
Swoops wings are quite thin and weakly armored making them susceptible to artillery fire

Sample Post:
"Swoop""Grimlock""Snarl""Slag""Sludge"said Wheeljack "Optimus these five are a new squad of 'bots you requested I suggest calling them dinobots""thank you wheeljack i look forward to seeing them in action"said Optimus Prime.
later that day
"raghhhhh"""raorrrrrrr"""grahhhhhhhhh""brawhhhhhhhhh""sgrahhhhhhh"
"prime we got a situation out ere"said Ironhide "the dinobots are wakin up get the energon nets" (optimus,wheeljack,tracks,brawn,spike,bumblebee,and ratchet come running in)"autobot fire the nets"yell optimus over the cries of the dinobots.'Prime what just went on" asked spike "i don't know spike i think the dinobots have somehow developed an urge to join the battle"replied bumblebee "im not so sure 'bee they coulda been tryin to attack the base"said ironhide"they should be deactivated.

Name: Razatron

Allegiance: Decepticon

Function: Mercinary

Alt. mode: Blue and White F16 Eagle

Weapons: Null Ray Rifle, and Flak Rifle

Special Abilities: Able to fly in robot mode

Height: 35 ft. 10.668 meters.

Quote: "The enemy of my enemy is my friend"

STRENGTH: 6
INTELLIGENCE: 8
DEXTERITY: 5
SPEED: 9
ENDURANCE: 8
COURAGE: 8
FIREPOWER: 6
ACCURACY: 8
MELEE: 4
TECH SKILL: 5
CHARISMA: 7
RANK:

Profile: He was originally created to protect the Senators, but when the war started he sympathized with and join the Decepticons. After years of fighting and not gaining any profit, or anything of value, he quit the Decepticons and left Cybertron to fight in the wars of other planets. After the Autobots and Decepticons started to inflitrate Earth he then started to slowly, and pessimistically make an attempt to rejoin the Decepticons. He doesn't really care if the Decepticons really win, he just hopes to get paid while he works for them. He may or may not leave them if they stop paying him, he doesn't really care either. Some of the other Decepticons have even thought about trying to frame him for mutiny, but when there is no evidence those Decepticons are then executed. He now hates Earth, and wishes to leave this mud ball they call a planet.

Abilities: He is capable of going mach 3 in his alternate mode. He can blast small holes into his opponents with his Flak Rifle, and can temporarily short out computers with his Null Ray Rifle for a maximum of 30 seconds. He has the ability to fly while in his bot mode. His alternate mode is a Blue and White F 16.

Weaknesses: He has a tendency to be arrogant, and act like a complete loser, and there for thinks that he should be the leader of the Decepticons. He has very been fortunate to be able to keep this information from their current leader, and from anyone else who would have anything to gain from having him disappear. His physical weakness that when he is in a fight he is more likely to crah when they blast him in the cockpit, and air intake manifold. He tends to have an "I Don't Care" attitude when working on any thing. When he finally gets his tasks done, he gripes and complains about why he "would never have come to earth to if he knew he was going to do all the work." He has no real friends, except the ones in his mind, and he argues with them too.

Sample Post:
Arrival 0100 Hours(1:00 AM)

The last of the air patrols are going back to base. He doesn't want any one to see him in is bot mode, so he scans one of the flying jets and takes its form. When he landed he then started to pretend to be a regular fighter jet.

After he had been hidden for 6 years, he started to receive transmissions from others like himself. He then decided to make a request to rejoin the Decepticons, after leaving them four million years earlier. After being accepted back he then went mobile and started to try and make energon for himself, in areas, where humans are not likely to be, well at least non-living humans. When he was told to report to base he griped and complained the whole way there.

He is trying to get enough energy and parts to make a ship, or something that could leave the orbit of this mud-ball they call a planet. He how ever has not been able to get the parts that he has scrounged for, so he might as well cause havoc for some of the Autobots that are here while he waits, its not like they have anything important to do.

"Blade"

Allegiance: Autobots
Function: special ops
Alt. mode: Nissan 300z
Weapons: Energy katana, electro-disruptor blasters, energy shurikens.
Special Abilities: cloaking device (-6)
Height: 22 feet
Quote: "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom."

Strength: 04
Intelligence: 07
Dexterity: 07
Speed: 08
Endurance: 05
Courage: 07
Firepower: 04
Accuracy: 05
Melee: 08
Tech Skill: 02
Charisma: 07
Rank:

Profile: Blade knows he isn't the biggest or strongest Autobot, but is as brave as Primus himself. He has found strength from mental and spiritual discipline, and is dedicated to what he believes in. Blade is wise and his spark is pure, which is likely why he finds himself a confidant to many of his Kin. He is one of Optimus's most loyal followers, and would sacrifice his own spark for his warrior brethren.
As a curious Autobot, Blade is a student of Metaphysics. He yearns knowledge, and believes the war with the Decepticons will sadly never end, for good and evil must always co-exist to bring balance to the universe.


Abilities: Blade relies on his speed, combat dexterity and precision to get the job done. Trained in the arts of Circuit-Su and Metallikato, He is a specialist at gaining information behind the battle lines, using his cloaking device and skill to go unnoticed even in the most dangerous of areas. Also, Blades energy swords can slice through even the thickest of Decepticon armor, making Blade a warrior to be fearful of.


Weaknesses: His size, while giving him several advantages, also makes him vunerable to more powerful attacks.

Sample post:
Back on Cybertron, the starlight softly reflects off a a dark surface, scared by years of warfare. A lone figure quickly approaches from the distance, quickly moving in and out of cover, with a look of determination on his rigid face.

He was told his mission was suicide, that no Autobot could go so deep into Decepticon territory unnoticed, but he is no normal Autobot. His name in Blades, and he is a dying breed, trained in the arts of stealth, he knows no fear. As he comes upon a Decepticon prison camp, he smirks, engages his cloaking suit and says to himself "This is what I live for".

Blade quickly approaches the prison camp, searching for his friend Bumble Bee who was captured a few nights earlier. The air smells of burning rubber and hot metal, the corpses of dead Autobots litter the area. Using his sensors, he scans the area and sure enough picks up on Bee's energy signature. He knows this task won't be easy, for he is outnumbered 6 to 1 by Decepticon drone soilders. Quickly he strikes the two drones guarding Bee's holding cell, decapitating both with one fell swoop. He carefully downloads the holding cell codes from one of the dead soilder's cortex, and releases his weakened, but still alive friend. As they sneak away into the darkness, Bee asks "What took you so long". Blade dosen't comment, he just smirks.

metalspark wrote:Name:Swoop

Function:Bombardier

Alliance:Autobot

Quote:"Fear can hit targets
unreachable by bullets."

Alt.Mode:Pteranodon

Weapon/s:2X Wing mounted missile launchers,Thermal Sword

Strength:6
Intelligence:6
Courage:7
Dexterity:7
Speed:8
Endurance:9
Firepower:7
Accuracy:6
Melee:8
Rank:5
Tech Skills:7

Bio:
Swoop is the most affable of the Dinobots and often acts as their liaison to the other Autobots. Even though he's able to get along
with them better than the rest of the Dinobots,he still agrees with
his comrades belief that Optimus Prime is an ineffective leader.
Some Autobots are put off by his fearsome dinosaur mode and his loyalty to his team,both of which disguise's his out-of-place kindness and good natured personality. This secretly makes swoop sad, but this sorrow is outweighed by his dedication to the Dinobot squad and their goals. Swoop has managed to turn his grotesque form into an advantage on the battlefield, where he has become an expert at using his diving attacks and disconcerting battle cries to confuse and scatter his terrified decepticon targets.

Abilities:
Swoop may have above average strength but he is still the weakest Dinobot.In pteranadon mode ho can fly at speeds of 250 miles per hour
for 700 miles at a time.He is a top-notch flyer and his maneuverability is awesome. He has two wing mounted missile launchers
with air-to-air and air-to-ground capabilities. Each missile has a blast force equivalent of 5000lbs.of TNT,and they are accurate at ranges up to 8miles away. He can also use them in robot mode, as well as a thermal sword that heats up to 4000 centigrade and is capable of slicing through most decepticon armour plating. Swoop is highly fuel-efficient.
Weakness:
Swoops wings are quite thin and weakly armored making them susceptible to artillery fire

Sample Post:
"Swoop""Grimlock""Snarl""Slag""Sludge"said Wheeljack "Optimus these five are a new squad of 'bots you requested I suggest calling them dinobots""thank you wheeljack i look forward to seeing them in action"said Optimus Prime.
later that day
"raghhhhh"""raorrrrrrr"""grahhhhhhhhh""brawhhhhhhhhh""sgrahhhhhhh"
"prime we got a situation out ere"said Ironhide "the dinobots are wakin up get the energon nets" (optimus,wheeljack,tracks,brawn,spike,bumblebee,and ratchet come running in)"autobot fire the nets"yell optimus over the cries of the dinobots.'Prime what just went on" asked spike "i don't know spike i think the dinobots have somehow developed an urge to join the battle"replied bumblebee "im not so sure 'bee they coulda been tryin to attack the base"said ironhide"they should be deactivated.

He has no height, his tech skill is too high, the whole profile is formatted strangely, stop hitting the enter key after each sentence. The sample post makes no sense, Spike is not in the game, and the Dinobots were not created by Wheeljack, this game is not set in the cartoon continuity. Write something else that coincides with the storyline and game setting. Do not repost the same rubbish again or your attempt will be denied.

Razatron wrote:Name: Razatron

Allegiance: Decepticon

Function: Mercinary

Alt. mode: Blue and White F16 Eagle

Weapons: Null Ray Rifle, and Flak Rifle

Special Abilities: Able to fly in robot mode

Height: 35 ft. 10.668 meters.

Quote: "The enemy of my enemy is my friend"

STRENGTH: 6
INTELLIGENCE: 8
DEXTERITY: 5
SPEED: 9
ENDURANCE: 8
COURAGE: 8
FIREPOWER: 6
ACCURACY: 8
MELEE: 4
TECH SKILL: 5
CHARISMA: 7
RANK:

Profile: He was originally created to protect the Senators, but when the war started he sympathized with and join the Decepticons. After years of fighting and not gaining any profit, or anything of value, he quit the Decepticons and left Cybertron to fight in the wars of other planets. After the Autobots and Decepticons started to inflitrate Earth he then started to slowly, and pessimistically make an attempt to rejoin the Decepticons. He doesn't really care if the Decepticons really win, he just hopes to get paid while he works for them. He may or may not leave them if they stop paying him, he doesn't really care either. Some of the other Decepticons have even thought about trying to frame him for mutiny, but when there is no evidence those Decepticons are then executed. He now hates Earth, and wishes to leave this mud ball they call a planet.

Abilities: He is capable of going mach 3 in his alternate mode. He can blast small holes into his opponents with his Flak Rifle, and can temporarily short out computers with his Null Ray Rifle for a maximum of 30 seconds. He has the ability to fly while in his bot mode. His alternate mode is a Blue and White F 16.

Weaknesses: He has a tendency to be arrogant, and act like a complete loser, and there for thinks that he should be the leader of the Decepticons. He has very been fortunate to be able to keep this information from their current leader, and from anyone else who would have anything to gain from having him disappear. His physical weakness that when he is in a fight he is more likely to crah when they blast him in the cockpit, and air intake manifold. He tends to have an "I Don't Care" attitude when working on any thing. When he finally gets his tasks done, he gripes and complains about why he "would never have come to earth to if he knew he was going to do all the work." He has no real friends, except the ones in his mind, and he argues with them too.

Sample Post:
Arrival 0100 Hours(1:00 AM)

The last of the air patrols are going back to base. He doesn't want any one to see him in is bot mode, so he scans one of the flying jets and takes its form. When he landed he then started to pretend to be a regular fighter jet.

After he had been hidden for 6 years, he started to receive transmissions from others like himself. He then decided to make a request to rejoin the Decepticons, after leaving them four million years earlier. After being accepted back he then went mobile and started to try and make energon for himself, in areas, where humans are not likely to be, well at least non-living humans. When he was told to report to base he griped and complained the whole way there.

He is trying to get enough energy and parts to make a ship, or something that could leave the orbit of this mud-ball they call a planet. He how ever has not been able to get the parts that he has scrounged for, so he might as well cause havoc for some of the Autobots that are here while he waits, its not like they have anything important to do.

You need to cut his stats down by 4. The profile will not work in the game. First, of all why would Megatron pay him when he has an infinite amount of unpaid soldiers to rely on? Secondly, he would most likely be killed as soon as one of the Cons sees him; due to him being so unpopular amongst them. You're going to need to trash the whole profile and start over.

nikeprime wrote:"Blade"

Allegiance: Autobots
Function: special ops
Alt. mode: Nissan 300z
Weapons: Energy katana, electro-disruptor blasters, energy shurikens.
Special Abilities: cloaking device (-6)
Height: 22 feet
Quote: "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom."

Strength: 04
Intelligence: 07
Dexterity: 07
Speed: 08
Endurance: 05
Courage: 07
Firepower: 04
Accuracy: 05
Melee: 08
Tech Skill: 02
Charisma: 07
Rank:

Profile: Blade knows he isn't the biggest or strongest Autobot, but is as brave as Primus himself. He has found strength from mental and spiritual discipline, and is dedicated to what he believes in. Blade is wise and his spark is pure, which is likely why he finds himself a confidant to many of his Kin. He is one of Optimus's most loyal followers, and would sacrifice his own spark for his warrior brethren.
As a curious Autobot, Blade is a student of Metaphysics. He yearns knowledge, and believes the war with the Decepticons will sadly never end, for good and evil must always co-exist to bring balance to the universe.


Abilities: Blade relies on his speed, combat dexterity and precision to get the job done. Trained in the arts of Circuit-Su and Metallikato, He is a specialist at gaining information behind the battle lines, using his cloaking device and skill to go unnoticed even in the most dangerous of areas. Also, Blades energy swords can slice through even the thickest of Decepticon armor, making Blade a warrior to be fearful of.


Weaknesses: His size, while giving him several advantages, also makes him vunerable to more powerful attacks.

Sample post:
Back on Cybertron, the starlight softly reflects off a a dark surface, scared by years of warfare. A lone figure quickly approaches from the distance, quickly moving in and out of cover, with a look of determination on his rigid face.

He was told his mission was suicide, that no Autobot could go so deep into Decepticon territory unnoticed, but he is no normal Autobot. His name in Blades, and he is a dying breed, trained in the arts of stealth, he knows no fear. As he comes upon a Decepticon prison camp, he smirks, engages his cloaking suit and says to himself "This is what I live for".

Blade quickly approaches the prison camp, searching for his friend Bumble Bee who was captured a few nights earlier. The air smells of burning rubber and hot metal, the corpses of dead Autobots litter the area. Using his sensors, he scans the area and sure enough picks up on Bee's energy signature. He knows this task won't be easy, for he is outnumbered 6 to 1 by Decepticon drone soilders. Quickly he strikes the two drones guarding Bee's holding cell, decapitating both with one fell swoop. He carefully downloads the holding cell codes from one of the dead soilder's cortex, and releases his weakened, but still alive friend. As they sneak away into the darkness, Bee asks "What took you so long". Blade dosen't comment, he just smirks.

Put up his height in meters. Also describe his cloaking device, how does it work, what does it cloak, just his image or does it cloak his energy signatures? The better it is the more points it will cost you, so choose wisely. Also, tone down the assumed 'awesomeness' of the character in the sample; he's no Jazz.

Name:Swoop

Function:Bombardier

Alliance:Autobot

Quote:"Fear can hit targets
unreachable by bullets."

Alt.Mode:Pteranodon

Weapon/s:2X Wing mounted missile launchers,Thermal Sword

Height:24 feet

Strength:6
Intelligence:6
Courage:7
Dexterity:7
Speed:8
Endurance:9
Firepower:7
Accuracy:6
Melee:8
Rank:5
Tech Skills:5

Bio:
Swoop is the most affable of the Dinobots and often acts as their liaison to the other Autobots.Even though he's able to get along
with them better than the rest of the Dinobots,he still agrees with
his comrades belief that Optimus Prime is an ineffective leader.
Some Autobots are put off by his fearsome dinosaur mode and his loyalty to his team,both of which disguise's his out-of-place kindness and good natured personality.This secretly makes swoop sad, but this sorrow is outweighed by his dedication to the Dinobot squad and their goals. Swoop has managed to turn his grotesque form into an advantage on the battlefield, where he has become an expert at using his diving attacks and disconcerting battle cries to confuse and scatter his terrified decepticon targets.
Abilities:
Swoop may have above average strength but he is still the weakest Dinobot.In pteranadon mode ho can fly at speeds of 250 miles per hour
for 700 miles at a time.He is a top-notch flyer and his maneuverability is awesome.He has two wing mounted missile launchers
with air-to-air and air-to-ground capabilities. Each missile has a blast force equivalent of 5000lbs.of TNT,and they are accurate at ranges up to 8miles away.He can also use them in robot mode, as well as a thermal sword that heats up to 4000 centigrade and is capable of slicing through most decepticon armour plating.Swoop is highly fuel-efficient.
Weakness:
Swoops wings are quite thin and weakly armored making them susceptible to artillery fire.

Sample Post:
"Grimlock me swoop say we going in wrong direction" said swoop as they patrolled the autobot base"me grimlock say you totally wrong we going right way"as he bashed swoop aside"me slag say we all go this way"roared slag as has walked back to base to relive himself of grimlock and swoop."Swoop say you grimlock bad leader""well me grimlock say you not very nice"as the got ready to have a brawl,"me sludge say shut the frag up"as he tried to stop the fight but instead getting kicked in the skidplate by grimlock.

"Blade"

Allegiance: Autobots
Function: special ops
Alt. mode: A Black and Teal Bugatti Veyron
Weapons: Energy katana, electro-disruptor blasters, energy shurikens.
Special Abilities: cloaking device (hides from Optical sensors but not energy sensors) (-6)
Height: 20 feet/6.09 m

Quote: "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom."

Strength: 04
Intelligence: 07
Dexterity: 07
Speed: 08
Endurance: 05
Courage: 07
Firepower: 04
Accuracy: 05
Melee: 08
Tech Skill: 02
Charisma: 07
Rank:

Profile: Blade knows he isn't the biggest or strongest Autobot, but is as brave as Primus himself. He has found strength from mental and spiritual discipline, and is dedicated to what he believes in. Blade is wise and his spark is pure, which is likely why he finds himself a confidant to many of his Kin. He is one of Optimus's most loyal followers, and would sacrifice his own spark for his warrior brethren.
As a curious Autobot, Blade is a student of Metaphysics. He yearns knowledge, and believes the war with the Decepticons will sadly never end, for good and evil must always co-exist to bring balance to the universe.


Abilities: Blade relies on his speed, combat dexterity and precision to get the job done. Trained in the arts of Circuit-Su and Metallikato, He is a specialist at gaining information behind the battle lines, using his cloaking device and skill to go unnoticed even in the most dangerous of areas. Also, Blades energy swords can slice through even the thickest of Decepticon armor, making Blade a warrior to be fearful of.


Weaknesses: His size, while giving him several advantages, also makes him vunerable to more powerful attacks.

Sample post:
Back on Cybertron, the starlight softly reflects off a a dark surface scared by years of warfare. A lone figure quickly approaches from the distance, quickly moving in and out of cover with a look of determination on his rigid face.

He was told his mission was suicide, that no Autobot could go so deep into Decepticon territory unnoticed, but he is no normal Autobot. His name in Blades, trained in the arts of stealth, he knows no fear. As he comes upon a Decepticon prison camp, he smirks, engages his cloaking armor and says to himself "This is what I live for".

Blade quickly approaches the prison camp, searching for his friend Bumble Bee who was captured a few nights earlier. The air smells of burning rubber and hot metal, the corpses of dead Autobots litter the area. Using his sensors, he scans the area and sure enough picks up on Bee's energy signature. Quickly he strikes the two drones guarding Bee's holding cell, decapitating both with one fell swoop. He carefully downloads the holding cell codes from one of the dead soilder's cortex, and releases his weakened, but still alive friend. As they sneak away into the darkness, Bee asks "What took you so long". Blade dosen't comment, he just smirks.

nikeprime wrote:"Blade"

Allegiance: Autobots
Function: special ops
Alt. mode: A Black and Teal Bugatti Veyron
Weapons: Energy katana, electro-disruptor blasters, energy shurikens.
Special Abilities: cloaking device (hides from Optical sensors but not energy sensors) (-6)
Height: 20 feet/6.09 m

Quote: "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom."

Strength: 04
Intelligence: 07
Dexterity: 07
Speed: 08
Endurance: 05
Courage: 07
Firepower: 04
Accuracy: 05
Melee: 08
Tech Skill: 02
Charisma: 07
Rank:

Profile: Blade knows he isn't the biggest or strongest Autobot, but is as brave as Primus himself. He has found strength from mental and spiritual discipline, and is dedicated to what he believes in. Blade is wise and his spark is pure, which is likely why he finds himself a confidant to many of his Kin. He is one of Optimus's most loyal followers, and would sacrifice his own spark for his warrior brethren.
As a curious Autobot, Blade is a student of Metaphysics. He yearns knowledge, and believes the war with the Decepticons will sadly never end, for good and evil must always co-exist to bring balance to the universe.


Abilities: Blade relies on his speed, combat dexterity and precision to get the job done. Trained in the arts of Circuit-Su and Metallikato, He is a specialist at gaining information behind the battle lines, using his cloaking device and skill to go unnoticed even in the most dangerous of areas. Also, Blades energy swords can slice through even the thickest of Decepticon armor, making Blade a warrior to be fearful of.


Weaknesses: His size, while giving him several advantages, also makes him vunerable to more powerful attacks.

Sample post:
Back on Cybertron, the starlight softly reflects off a a dark surface scared by years of warfare. A lone figure quickly approaches from the distance, quickly moving in and out of cover with a look of determination on his rigid face.

He was told his mission was suicide, that no Autobot could go so deep into Decepticon territory unnoticed, but he is no normal Autobot. His name in Blades, trained in the arts of stealth, he knows no fear. As he comes upon a Decepticon prison camp, he smirks, engages his cloaking armor and says to himself "This is what I live for".

Blade quickly approaches the prison camp, searching for his friend Bumble Bee who was captured a few nights earlier. The air smells of burning rubber and hot metal, the corpses of dead Autobots litter the area. Using his sensors, he scans the area and sure enough picks up on Bee's energy signature. Quickly he strikes the two drones guarding Bee's holding cell, decapitating both with one fell swoop. He carefully downloads the holding cell codes from one of the dead soilder's cortex, and releases his weakened, but still alive friend. As they sneak away into the darkness, Bee asks "What took you so long". Blade dosen't comment, he just smirks.

I asked you to describe how the cloaking device works.

Devastron wrote:

Nemesis Rodimus wrote:Okay, here I go. My previous character, Hubcap, was denied, so I'm going for Ironhide.


Name: Ironhide

Allegiance: Autobot

Function: Security

Alt. Mode: Red SUV

Weapons: Gatling Gun, laser rifle

Special Abilities: Water Gun (shoots liquid nitrogen, glue, ect.)

Height: 20 ft/5.20 m

Quote: "High tech security is no replacement for guts!"

Strength: 7
Intelligence: 7
Dexterity: 3
Speed: 3
Endurance: 9
Courage: 10
Firepower: 7
Accuracy: 7
Melee: 8
Tech Skill: 4
Charisma: 7
Rank:

Profile: "Go chew on a microchip!" is Ironhide's slogan. Prefers action to words. Bodyguard to Optimus Prime. In charge of guarding anything of importance. Gruff, but kind. Trithyllium-steel skin makes him nearly invulnerable to attack. Shoots variety of liquids from supercooled nitrogen to superheated lead. Has sonar, radar, radiowave detector. Slowest and most fragile of the group. Ironhide was built at a time when armor was thick, and circuitry was simple. He is the oldest of the Autobots, tested in thousands of battles, over countless centuries. He has been injured many times, but never deactivated. For every scratch and scar that he bears he has a tale to tell, and most of the younger Autobots are all too eager to hear them. Gruff, and sometimes grumpy, he is also naturally protective of the other Autobots. He is tough, rough, and nearly impossible to damage.

Abilites: Ironhide is a tough, impossible-to-stop Autobot. He can hit a top speed of 100 mph, and though he isn't the fastest Autobot, he is one of the toughest. He can use his water gun to great effect. The wall in Shockwave's base hates the weapon -- he's broken in and out of that base many times using it. He isn't a sharpshooter when it comes down to a sniping mission, but when he gets up close, the Decepticon he is fighting has oil dripping from many cracked joints.

Weaknesses: Perhaps one of Ironhide's only weaknesses is the fact that he's overeager. Whenever he finds out that something wrong, he rushes right in, not taking into account the fact that the situation might be an ambush. If he is ambushed, he often is not able to fight back before he is defeated. Only the fact that he's close friends with Optimus Prime has saved his life time and again.

Sample Post: Ironhide marched down the hallway of the Ark and into the command center. Once again, Ratchet was working on injured Autobots. He shook his head. If he were Ratchet, he wouldn't have the patience to fix everyone.
"Howdy, Ironhide."
That was young Bumblebee, the smallest Autobot. Ironhide looked down at his little buddy. Bumblebee was limping up to Ratchet. Ironhide followed closely.
"Uh, what happened?" Ironhide asked the young Autobot.
"I was...ambushed by Runabout," Bumblebee muttered.
Ironhide punched the wall and fingered the gattling gun hanging loosely on his waist. No one did that to his little buddy! He turned to run out of the base. Optimus Prime grabbed his shoulder firmly.
"Calm down, Ironhide," Optimus said gently. "You don't even know where Runabout is."
"I don't care!" Ironhide replied. "I'm going out to find him!"
"Very well." Optimus sighed and released Ironhide's arm. "At least take Bumper and Outback with you, Ironhide."
"Alright," Ironhide mumbled. "Guys, let's roll out!"
Ironhide didn't wait for his two teammates to catch up. He put the pedal to the metal and roared straight into the middle of the desert. He was picking up a faint energy signature. There was a Decepticon nearby. He transformed into his bipedal robot mode.
"Alright, Runabout, where are you?" he shouted.
Behind him, Bumper and Outback were getting closer. He pulled out his gattling gun in one hand while transforming his other hand into a water gun and setting it to its liquid nitrogen mode.
"Wait up!" cried Bumper.
Behind a nearby hill, a shadowy form aimed a sniper rifle at Ironhide's head. Just another second, and the old bot would be dead.
"Hurry up!" Ironhide cried.
Before he knew what was happening, there was a loud *BOOM*. The next thing he knew, he was on the ground. oil was leaking out of one eye. It had been an ambush all along. Prime was right...
"G-guys...get me b-back...to R-Ratchet...before I..."
He blacked out, and for many long hours, did not wake up. He was tossed into fitful dreams about his past. He remembered his first battle, when he'd met Optimus, and...
"He's been fully repaired," Ratchet said.
Ironhide sat up. He was okay. Thank goodness.

I'm a little bit confused on part of the profile. You mention how tough he is but then also call him fragile. As I understand it Ironhide is considered very tough and resistant to damage but has problems with internal breakdowns due to his age. I think you need to clear up that part a bit. Change the bit about him being the oldest Autobot to just one of the older Autobots. I'd also like to see more explanation of his watergun. I think you mean when he slides his hand back into his arm in exchange for a gun but you never really describe it beyond what it does. In the sample post I'd like to see more of his thoughts and not just actions and dialogue. Skipping lines between paragraphs would make it easier to read too.

Done. You can reread it if you want.

Ember wrote:

nikeprime wrote:"Blade"

Allegiance: Autobots
Function: special ops
Alt. mode: A Black and Teal Bugatti Veyron
Weapons: Energy katana, electro-disruptor blasters, energy shurikens.
Special Abilities: cloaking device (hides from Optical sensors but not energy sensors) (-6)
Height: 20 feet/6.09 m

Quote: "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom."

Strength: 04
Intelligence: 07
Dexterity: 07
Speed: 08
Endurance: 05
Courage: 07
Firepower: 04
Accuracy: 05
Melee: 08
Tech Skill: 02
Charisma: 07
Rank:

Profile: Blade knows he isn't the biggest or strongest Autobot, but is as brave as Primus himself. He has found strength from mental and spiritual discipline, and is dedicated to what he believes in. Blade is wise and his spark is pure, which is likely why he finds himself a confidant to many of his Kin. He is one of Optimus's most loyal followers, and would sacrifice his own spark for his warrior brethren.
As a curious Autobot, Blade is a student of Metaphysics. He yearns knowledge, and believes the war with the Decepticons will sadly never end, for good and evil must always co-exist to bring balance to the universe.


Abilities: Blade relies on his speed, combat dexterity and precision to get the job done. Trained in the arts of Circuit-Su and Metallikato, He is a specialist at gaining information behind the battle lines, using his cloaking device and skill to go unnoticed even in the most dangerous of areas. Also, Blades energy swords can slice through even the thickest of Decepticon armor, making Blade a warrior to be fearful of.


Weaknesses: His size, while giving him several advantages, also makes him vunerable to more powerful attacks.

Sample post:
Back on Cybertron, the starlight softly reflects off a a dark surface scared by years of warfare. A lone figure quickly approaches from the distance, quickly moving in and out of cover with a look of determination on his rigid face.

He was told his mission was suicide, that no Autobot could go so deep into Decepticon territory unnoticed, but he is no normal Autobot. His name in Blades, trained in the arts of stealth, he knows no fear. As he comes upon a Decepticon prison camp, he smirks, engages his cloaking armor and says to himself "This is what I live for".

Blade quickly approaches the prison camp, searching for his friend Bumble Bee who was captured a few nights earlier. The air smells of burning rubber and hot metal, the corpses of dead Autobots litter the area. Using his sensors, he scans the area and sure enough picks up on Bee's energy signature. Quickly he strikes the two drones guarding Bee's holding cell, decapitating both with one fell swoop. He carefully downloads the holding cell codes from one of the dead soilder's cortex, and releases his weakened, but still alive friend. As they sneak away into the darkness, Bee asks "What took you so long". Blade dosen't comment, he just smirks.

I asked you to describe how the cloaking device works.

Sorry, I thought by me putting "hides him from optical sensors and but not energy sensors" was describing it. I explain this device in further detail.

"Blade"

Allegiance: Autobots
Function: special ops
Alt. mode: A Black and Teal Bugatti Veyron
Weapons: Energy katana, electro-disruptor blasters, energy shurikens.
Special Abilities: cloaking device (hides from Optical sensors but not energy sensors) (-6)
Height: 20 feet/6.09 m

Quote: "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom."

Strength: 04
Intelligence: 07
Dexterity: 07
Speed: 08
Endurance: 05
Courage: 07
Firepower: 04
Accuracy: 05
Melee: 08
Tech Skill: 02
Charisma: 07
Rank:

Profile: Blade knows he isn't the biggest or strongest Autobot, but is as brave as Primus himself. He has found strength from mental and spiritual discipline, and is dedicated to what he believes in. Blade is wise and his spark is pure, which is likely why he finds himself a confidant to many of his Kin. He is one of Optimus's most loyal followers, and would sacrifice his own spark for his warrior brethren.
As a curious Autobot, Blade is a student of Metaphysics. He yearns knowledge, and believes the war with the Decepticons will sadly never end, for good and evil must always co-exist to bring balance to the universe.


Abilities: Blade relies on his speed, combat dexterity and precision to get the job done. Trained in the arts of Circuit-Su and Metallikato, He is a specialist at gaining information behind the battle lines, using his cloaking device which is made of advanced meta materials that cause light to be deflected around him, causing him to be invisible to optical sensors. These specific skills help blade go unnoticed even in the most dangerous of areas. Also, Blades energy swords can slice through even the thickest of Decepticon armor, making Blade a warrior to be fearful of.


Weaknesses: His size, while giving him several advantages, also makes him vunerable to more powerful attacks.

Sample post:
Back on Cybertron, the starlight softly reflects off a a dark surface scared by years of warfare. A lone figure quickly approaches from the distance, quickly moving in and out of cover with a look of determination on his rigid face.

He was told his mission was suicide, that no Autobot could go so deep into Decepticon territory unnoticed, but he is no normal Autobot. His name in Blades, trained in the arts of stealth, he knows no fear. As he comes upon a Decepticon prison camp, he smirks, engages his cloaking armor and says to himself "This is what I live for".

Blade quickly approaches the prison camp, searching for his friend Bumble Bee who was captured a few nights earlier. The air smells of burning rubber and hot metal, the corpses of dead Autobots litter the area. Using his sensors, he scans the area and sure enough picks up on Bee's energy signature. Quickly he strikes the two drones guarding Bee's holding cell, decapitating both with one fell swoop. He carefully downloads the holding cell codes from one of the dead soilder's cortex, and releases his weakened, but still alive friend. As they sneak away into the darkness, Bee asks "What took you so long". Blade dosen't comment, he just smirks.

nikeprime wrote:"Blade"

Allegiance: Autobots
Function: special ops
Alt. mode: A Black and Teal Bugatti Veyron
Weapons: Energy katana, electro-disruptor blasters, energy shurikens.
Special Abilities: cloaking device (hides from Optical sensors but not energy sensors) (-6)
Height: 20 feet/6.09 m

Quote: "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom."

Strength: 04
Intelligence: 07
Dexterity: 07
Speed: 08
Endurance: 05
Courage: 07
Firepower: 04
Accuracy: 05
Melee: 08
Tech Skill: 02
Charisma: 07
Rank:

Profile: Blade knows he isn't the biggest or strongest Autobot, but is as brave as Primus himself. He has found strength from mental and spiritual discipline, and is dedicated to what he believes in. Blade is wise and his spark is pure, which is likely why he finds himself a confidant to many of his Kin. He is one of Optimus's most loyal followers, and would sacrifice his own spark for his warrior brethren.
As a curious Autobot, Blade is a student of Metaphysics. He yearns knowledge, and believes the war with the Decepticons will sadly never end, for good and evil must always co-exist to bring balance to the universe.


Abilities: Blade relies on his speed, combat dexterity and precision to get the job done. Trained in the arts of Circuit-Su and Metallikato, He is a specialist at gaining information behind the battle lines, using his cloaking device which is made of advanced meta materials that cause light to be deflected around him, causing him to be invisible to optical sensors. These specific skills help blade go unnoticed even in the most dangerous of areas. Also, Blades energy swords can slice through even the thickest of Decepticon armor, making Blade a warrior to be fearful of.


Weaknesses: His size, while giving him several advantages, also makes him vunerable to more powerful attacks.

Sample post:
Back on Cybertron, the starlight softly reflects off a a dark surface scared by years of warfare. A lone figure quickly approaches from the distance, quickly moving in and out of cover with a look of determination on his rigid face.

He was told his mission was suicide, that no Autobot could go so deep into Decepticon territory unnoticed, but he is no normal Autobot. His name in Blades, trained in the arts of stealth, he knows no fear. As he comes upon a Decepticon prison camp, he smirks, engages his cloaking armor and says to himself "This is what I live for".

Blade quickly approaches the prison camp, searching for his friend Bumble Bee who was captured a few nights earlier. The air smells of burning rubber and hot metal, the corpses of dead Autobots litter the area. Using his sensors, he scans the area and sure enough picks up on Bee's energy signature. Quickly he strikes the two drones guarding Bee's holding cell, decapitating both with one fell swoop. He carefully downloads the holding cell codes from one of the dead soilder's cortex, and releases his weakened, but still alive friend. As they sneak away into the darkness, Bee asks "What took you so long". Blade dosen't comment, he just smirks.

That's better. Approved. Start him in the Ark.

Nemesis Rodimus wrote:

Devastron wrote:

Nemesis Rodimus wrote:Okay, here I go. My previous character, Hubcap, was denied, so I'm going for Ironhide.


Name: Ironhide

Allegiance: Autobot

Function: Security

Alt. Mode: Red SUV

Weapons: Gatling Gun, laser rifle

Special Abilities: Water Gun (shoots liquid nitrogen, glue, ect.)

Height: 20 ft/5.20 m

Quote: "High tech security is no replacement for guts!"

Strength: 7
Intelligence: 7
Dexterity: 3
Speed: 3
Endurance: 9
Courage: 10
Firepower: 7
Accuracy: 7
Melee: 8
Tech Skill: 4
Charisma: 7
Rank:

Profile: "Go chew on a microchip!" is Ironhide's slogan. Prefers action to words. Bodyguard to Optimus Prime. In charge of guarding anything of importance. Gruff, but kind. Trithyllium-steel skin makes him nearly invulnerable to attack. Shoots variety of liquids from supercooled nitrogen to superheated lead. Has sonar, radar, radiowave detector. Slowest and most fragile of the group. Ironhide was built at a time when armor was thick, and circuitry was simple. He is the oldest of the Autobots, tested in thousands of battles, over countless centuries. He has been injured many times, but never deactivated. For every scratch and scar that he bears he has a tale to tell, and most of the younger Autobots are all too eager to hear them. Gruff, and sometimes grumpy, he is also naturally protective of the other Autobots. He is tough, rough, and nearly impossible to damage.

Abilites: Ironhide is a tough, impossible-to-stop Autobot. He can hit a top speed of 100 mph, and though he isn't the fastest Autobot, he is one of the toughest. He can use his water gun to great effect. The wall in Shockwave's base hates the weapon -- he's broken in and out of that base many times using it. He isn't a sharpshooter when it comes down to a sniping mission, but when he gets up close, the Decepticon he is fighting has oil dripping from many cracked joints.

Weaknesses: Perhaps one of Ironhide's only weaknesses is the fact that he's overeager. Whenever he finds out that something wrong, he rushes right in, not taking into account the fact that the situation might be an ambush. If he is ambushed, he often is not able to fight back before he is defeated. Only the fact that he's close friends with Optimus Prime has saved his life time and again.

Sample Post: Ironhide marched down the hallway of the Ark and into the command center. Once again, Ratchet was working on injured Autobots. He shook his head. If he were Ratchet, he wouldn't have the patience to fix everyone.
"Howdy, Ironhide."
That was young Bumblebee, the smallest Autobot. Ironhide looked down at his little buddy. Bumblebee was limping up to Ratchet. Ironhide followed closely.
"Uh, what happened?" Ironhide asked the young Autobot.
"I was...ambushed by Runabout," Bumblebee muttered.
Ironhide punched the wall and fingered the gattling gun hanging loosely on his waist. No one did that to his little buddy! He turned to run out of the base. Optimus Prime grabbed his shoulder firmly.
"Calm down, Ironhide," Optimus said gently. "You don't even know where Runabout is."
"I don't care!" Ironhide replied. "I'm going out to find him!"
"Very well." Optimus sighed and released Ironhide's arm. "At least take Bumper and Outback with you, Ironhide."
"Alright," Ironhide mumbled. "Guys, let's roll out!"
Ironhide didn't wait for his two teammates to catch up. He put the pedal to the metal and roared straight into the middle of the desert. He was picking up a faint energy signature. There was a Decepticon nearby. He transformed into his bipedal robot mode.
"Alright, Runabout, where are you?" he shouted.
Behind him, Bumper and Outback were getting closer. He pulled out his gattling gun in one hand while transforming his other hand into a water gun and setting it to its liquid nitrogen mode.
"Wait up!" cried Bumper.
Behind a nearby hill, a shadowy form aimed a sniper rifle at Ironhide's head. Just another second, and the old bot would be dead.
"Hurry up!" Ironhide cried.
Before he knew what was happening, there was a loud *BOOM*. The next thing he knew, he was on the ground. oil was leaking out of one eye. It had been an ambush all along. Prime was right...
"G-guys...get me b-back...to R-Ratchet...before I..."
He blacked out, and for many long hours, did not wake up. He was tossed into fitful dreams about his past. He remembered his first battle, when he'd met Optimus, and...
"He's been fully repaired," Ratchet said.
Ironhide sat up. He was okay. Thank goodness.

I'm a little bit confused on part of the profile. You mention how tough he is but then also call him fragile. As I understand it Ironhide is considered very tough and resistant to damage but has problems with internal breakdowns due to his age. I think you need to clear up that part a bit. Change the bit about him being the oldest Autobot to just one of the older Autobots. I'd also like to see more explanation of his watergun. I think you mean when he slides his hand back into his arm in exchange for a gun but you never really describe it beyond what it does. In the sample post I'd like to see more of his thoughts and not just actions and dialogue. Skipping lines between paragraphs would make it easier to read too.

Done. You can reread it if you want.

Please re-post the application.

Ember wrote:

Nemesis Rodimus wrote:

Devastron wrote:

Nemesis Rodimus wrote:Okay, here I go. My previous character, Hubcap, was denied, so I'm going for Ironhide.


Name: Ironhide

Allegiance: Autobot

Function: Security

Alt. Mode: Red SUV

Weapons: Gatling Gun, laser rifle

Special Abilities: Water Gun (shoots liquid nitrogen, glue, ect.)

Height: 20 ft/5.20 m

Quote: "High tech security is no replacement for guts!"

Strength: 7
Intelligence: 7
Dexterity: 3
Speed: 3
Endurance: 9
Courage: 10
Firepower: 7
Accuracy: 7
Melee: 8
Tech Skill: 4
Charisma: 7
Rank:

Profile: "Go chew on a microchip!" is Ironhide's slogan. Prefers action to words. Bodyguard to Optimus Prime. In charge of guarding anything of importance. Gruff, but kind. Trithyllium-steel skin makes him nearly invulnerable to attack. Shoots variety of liquids from supercooled nitrogen to superheated lead. Has sonar, radar, radiowave detector. Slowest and most fragile of the group. Ironhide was built at a time when armor was thick, and circuitry was simple. He is the oldest of the Autobots, tested in thousands of battles, over countless centuries. He has been injured many times, but never deactivated. For every scratch and scar that he bears he has a tale to tell, and most of the younger Autobots are all too eager to hear them. Gruff, and sometimes grumpy, he is also naturally protective of the other Autobots. He is tough, rough, and nearly impossible to damage.

Abilites: Ironhide is a tough, impossible-to-stop Autobot. He can hit a top speed of 100 mph, and though he isn't the fastest Autobot, he is one of the toughest. He can use his water gun to great effect. The wall in Shockwave's base hates the weapon -- he's broken in and out of that base many times using it. He isn't a sharpshooter when it comes down to a sniping mission, but when he gets up close, the Decepticon he is fighting has oil dripping from many cracked joints.

Weaknesses: Perhaps one of Ironhide's only weaknesses is the fact that he's overeager. Whenever he finds out that something wrong, he rushes right in, not taking into account the fact that the situation might be an ambush. If he is ambushed, he often is not able to fight back before he is defeated. Only the fact that he's close friends with Optimus Prime has saved his life time and again.

Sample Post: Ironhide marched down the hallway of the Ark and into the command center. Once again, Ratchet was working on injured Autobots. He shook his head. If he were Ratchet, he wouldn't have the patience to fix everyone.
"Howdy, Ironhide."
That was young Bumblebee, the smallest Autobot. Ironhide looked down at his little buddy. Bumblebee was limping up to Ratchet. Ironhide followed closely.
"Uh, what happened?" Ironhide asked the young Autobot.
"I was...ambushed by Runabout," Bumblebee muttered.
Ironhide punched the wall and fingered the gattling gun hanging loosely on his waist. No one did that to his little buddy! He turned to run out of the base. Optimus Prime grabbed his shoulder firmly.
"Calm down, Ironhide," Optimus said gently. "You don't even know where Runabout is."
"I don't care!" Ironhide replied. "I'm going out to find him!"
"Very well." Optimus sighed and released Ironhide's arm. "At least take Bumper and Outback with you, Ironhide."
"Alright," Ironhide mumbled. "Guys, let's roll out!"
Ironhide didn't wait for his two teammates to catch up. He put the pedal to the metal and roared straight into the middle of the desert. He was picking up a faint energy signature. There was a Decepticon nearby. He transformed into his bipedal robot mode.
"Alright, Runabout, where are you?" he shouted.
Behind him, Bumper and Outback were getting closer. He pulled out his gattling gun in one hand while transforming his other hand into a water gun and setting it to its liquid nitrogen mode.
"Wait up!" cried Bumper.
Behind a nearby hill, a shadowy form aimed a sniper rifle at Ironhide's head. Just another second, and the old bot would be dead.
"Hurry up!" Ironhide cried.
Before he knew what was happening, there was a loud *BOOM*. The next thing he knew, he was on the ground. oil was leaking out of one eye. It had been an ambush all along. Prime was right...
"G-guys...get me b-back...to R-Ratchet...before I..."
He blacked out, and for many long hours, did not wake up. He was tossed into fitful dreams about his past. He remembered his first battle, when he'd met Optimus, and...
"He's been fully repaired," Ratchet said.
Ironhide sat up. He was okay. Thank goodness.

I'm a little bit confused on part of the profile. You mention how tough he is but then also call him fragile. As I understand it Ironhide is considered very tough and resistant to damage but has problems with internal breakdowns due to his age. I think you need to clear up that part a bit. Change the bit about him being the oldest Autobot to just one of the older Autobots. I'd also like to see more explanation of his watergun. I think you mean when he slides his hand back into his arm in exchange for a gun but you never really describe it beyond what it does. In the sample post I'd like to see more of his thoughts and not just actions and dialogue. Skipping lines between paragraphs would make it easier to read too.

Done. You can reread it if you want.

Please re-post the application.

Sure, no problem.

Here we go:

Name: Ironhide

Allegiance: Autobot

Function: Security

Alt. Mode: Red SUV

Weapons: Gatling Gun, laser rifle

Special Abilities: Water Gun (shoots liquid nitrogen, glue, ect.)

Height: 20 ft/5.20 m

Quote: "High tech security is no replacement for guts!"

Strength: 7
Intelligence: 7
Dexterity: 3
Speed: 3
Endurance: 9
Courage: 10
Firepower: 7
Accuracy: 7
Melee: 8
Tech Skill: 4
Charisma: 7
Rank:

Profile: "Go chew on a microchip!" is Ironhide's slogan. Prefers action to words. Bodyguard to Optimus Prime. In charge of guarding anything of importance. Gruff, but kind. Trithyllium-steel skin makes him nearly invulnerable to attack. Shoots variety of liquids from supercooled nitrogen to superheated lead. Has sonar, radar, radiowave detector. Ironhide was built at a time when armor was thick, and circuitry was simple. He is one of the older Autobots, tested in thousands of battles, over countless centuries. He has been injured many times, but never deactivated. For every scratch and scar that he bears he has a tale to tell, and most of the younger Autobots are all too eager to hear them. Gruff, and sometimes grumpy, he is also naturally protective of the other Autobots. He is tough, rough, and nearly impossible to damage.

Abilites: Ironhide is a tough, impossible-to-stop Autobot. He can hit a top speed of 100 mph, and though he isn't the fastest Autobot, he is one of the toughest. He can use his water gun to great effect. The wall in Shockwave's base hates the weapon -- he's broken in and out of that base many times using it. The water gun has been used to glue Decepticons' feet to the ground, stick Starscream's mouth shut, and at one time hold together a chunk of the Ark that had broken off. But his favorite use for it is the time when Megatron was about to blast Optimus with his fusion cannon. He fired some instant glue in the cannon's barrel, and the weapon exploded in Megatron's face! He isn't a sharpshooter when it comes down to a sniping mission, but when he gets up close, the Decepticon he is fighting has oil dripping from many cracked joints.

Weaknesses: Perhaps one of Ironhide's only weaknesses is the fact that he's overeager. Whenever he finds out that something wrong, he rushes right in, not taking into account the fact that the situation might be an ambush. If he is ambushed, he often is not able to fight back before he is defeated. Only the fact that he's close friends with Optimus Prime has saved his life time and again.

Sample Post: Ironhide marched down the hallway of the Ark and into the command center. Once again, Ratchet was working on injured Autobots. He shook his head. If he were Ratchet, he wouldn't have the patience to fix everyone.

"Howdy, Ironhide."

That was young Bumblebee, the smallest Autobot. Ironhide looked down at his little buddy. Bumblebee was limping up to Ratchet. Ironhide followed closely.

"Uh, what happened?" Ironhide asked the young Autobot.

"I was...ambushed by Runabout," Bumblebee muttered.

Ironhide punched the wall and fingered the gattling gun hanging loosely on his waist. No one did that to his little buddy! He turned to run out of the base. This was his opportunity to do something! Optimus Prime grabbed his shoulder firmly.

"Calm down, Ironhide," Optimus said gently. "You don't even know where Runabout is."

"I don't care!" Ironhide replied. "I'm going out to find him!"

"Very well." Optimus sighed and released Ironhide's arm. "At least take Bumper and Outback with you, Ironhide."

"Alright," Ironhide mumbled. "Guys, let's roll out!"

Ironhide didn't wait for his two teammates to catch up. He put the pedal to the metal and roared straight into the middle of the desert. He was picking up a faint energy signature. There was a Decepticon nearby. He transformed into his bipedal robot mode. Why did Optimus have to team him up with others, anyway? It was like Optimus didn't respect him, didn't trust him, even! Aw, he'd clear that up later. It was time to get back to the business at hand.

"Alright, Runabout, where are you?" he shouted.

Behind him, Bumper and Outback were getting closer. He pulled out his gattling gun in one hand while transforming his other hand into a water gun and setting it to its liquid nitrogen mode.

"Wait up!" cried Bumper.

Behind a nearby hill, a shadowy form aimed a sniper rifle at Ironhide's head. Just another second, and the old bot would be dead.

"Hurry up!" Ironhide cried.

Before he knew what was happening, there was a loud *BOOM*. The next thing he knew, he was on the ground. oil was leaking out of one eye. It had been an ambush all along. Prime was right...why did he have to be so impatient?

"G-guys...get me b-back...to R-Ratchet...before I..."

He blacked out, and for many long hours, did not wake up. He was tossed into fitful dreams about his past. He remembered his first battle, when he'd met Optimus, and...

"He's been fully repaired," Ratchet said.

Ironhide sat up. He was okay. He knew that he had been wrong. He looked at Optimus.

"I...I'm sorry, sir. Listen, I should've obeyed. Should've waited for the kids. It's just, I've been feelin' useless lately. You know, I'm an older 'bot, and it seems like..."

"Ironhide, you'll never be useless. Now, I think you can return to your quarters and rest."

Ironhide saluted and walked away slowly. At least Prime understood him.

Nemesis Rodimus wrote:


Sure, no problem.

Here we go:

Name: Ironhide

Allegiance: Autobot

Function: Security

Alt. Mode: Red SUV

Weapons: Gatling Gun, laser rifle

Special Abilities: Water Gun (shoots liquid nitrogen, glue, ect.)

Height: 20 ft/5.20 m

Quote: "High tech security is no replacement for guts!"

Strength: 7
Intelligence: 7
Dexterity: 3
Speed: 3
Endurance: 9
Courage: 10
Firepower: 7
Accuracy: 7
Melee: 8
Tech Skill: 4
Charisma: 7
Rank:

Profile: "Go chew on a microchip!" is Ironhide's slogan. Prefers action to words. Bodyguard to Optimus Prime. In charge of guarding anything of importance. Gruff, but kind. Trithyllium-steel skin makes him nearly invulnerable to attack. Shoots variety of liquids from supercooled nitrogen to superheated lead. Has sonar, radar, radiowave detector. Ironhide was built at a time when armor was thick, and circuitry was simple. He is one of the older Autobots, tested in thousands of battles, over countless centuries. He has been injured many times, but never deactivated. For every scratch and scar that he bears he has a tale to tell, and most of the younger Autobots are all too eager to hear them. Gruff, and sometimes grumpy, he is also naturally protective of the other Autobots. He is tough, rough, and nearly impossible to damage.

Abilites: Ironhide is a tough, impossible-to-stop Autobot. He can hit a top speed of 100 mph, and though he isn't the fastest Autobot, he is one of the toughest. He can use his water gun to great effect. The wall in Shockwave's base hates the weapon -- he's broken in and out of that base many times using it. The water gun has been used to glue Decepticons' feet to the ground, stick Starscream's mouth shut, and at one time hold together a chunk of the Ark that had broken off. But his favorite use for it is the time when Megatron was about to blast Optimus with his fusion cannon. He fired some instant glue in the cannon's barrel, and the weapon exploded in Megatron's face! He isn't a sharpshooter when it comes down to a sniping mission, but when he gets up close, the Decepticon he is fighting has oil dripping from many cracked joints.

Weaknesses: Perhaps one of Ironhide's only weaknesses is the fact that he's overeager. Whenever he finds out that something wrong, he rushes right in, not taking into account the fact that the situation might be an ambush. If he is ambushed, he often is not able to fight back before he is defeated. Only the fact that he's close friends with Optimus Prime has saved his life time and again.

Sample Post: Ironhide marched down the hallway of the Ark and into the command center. Once again, Ratchet was working on injured Autobots. He shook his head. If he were Ratchet, he wouldn't have the patience to fix everyone.

"Howdy, Ironhide."

That was young Bumblebee, the smallest Autobot. Ironhide looked down at his little buddy. Bumblebee was limping up to Ratchet. Ironhide followed closely.

"Uh, what happened?" Ironhide asked the young Autobot.

"I was...ambushed by Runabout," Bumblebee muttered.

Ironhide punched the wall and fingered the gattling gun hanging loosely on his waist. No one did that to his little buddy! He turned to run out of the base. This was his opportunity to do something! Optimus Prime grabbed his shoulder firmly.

"Calm down, Ironhide," Optimus said gently. "You don't even know where Runabout is."

"I don't care!" Ironhide replied. "I'm going out to find him!"

"Very well." Optimus sighed and released Ironhide's arm. "At least take Bumper and Outback with you, Ironhide."

"Alright," Ironhide mumbled. "Guys, let's roll out!"

Ironhide didn't wait for his two teammates to catch up. He put the pedal to the metal and roared straight into the middle of the desert. He was picking up a faint energy signature. There was a Decepticon nearby. He transformed into his bipedal robot mode. Why did Optimus have to team him up with others, anyway? It was like Optimus didn't respect him, didn't trust him, even! Aw, he'd clear that up later. It was time to get back to the business at hand.

"Alright, Runabout, where are you?" he shouted.

Behind him, Bumper and Outback were getting closer. He pulled out his gattling gun in one hand while transforming his other hand into a water gun and setting it to its liquid nitrogen mode.

"Wait up!" cried Bumper.

Behind a nearby hill, a shadowy form aimed a sniper rifle at Ironhide's head. Just another second, and the old bot would be dead.

"Hurry up!" Ironhide cried.

Before he knew what was happening, there was a loud *BOOM*. The next thing he knew, he was on the ground. oil was leaking out of one eye. It had been an ambush all along. Prime was right...why did he have to be so impatient?

"G-guys...get me b-back...to R-Ratchet...before I..."

He blacked out, and for many long hours, did not wake up. He was tossed into fitful dreams about his past. He remembered his first battle, when he'd met Optimus, and...

"He's been fully repaired," Ratchet said.

Ironhide sat up. He was okay. He knew that he had been wrong. He looked at Optimus.

"I...I'm sorry, sir. Listen, I should've obeyed. Should've waited for the kids. It's just, I've been feelin' useless lately. You know, I'm an older 'bot, and it seems like..."

"Ironhide, you'll never be useless. Now, I think you can return to your quarters and rest."

Ironhide saluted and walked away slowly. At least Prime understood him.

I was kind of looking for more of what the watergun is and less of what it does. Is it a separate rifle? Is it a pair of guns that pop out when he slides his hands back into his arms?

Lets boost his height up to 28' and drop the Gatling gun. I've never heard of any G1 incarnation of him that uses that. Cut out the example where he gums up Megatron's fusion cannon, I don't see that happening. For his weakness I still wanted you to use his problem of breaking down as that's pretty much always been his weakness, along with the overeagerness.

On another note I just want to make sure you are familiar with the game setting. The RPG is based more on the IDW comics than any of the cartoons. The Autobots on Earth will be under an infiltration mission. I just want to make sure you understand that since parts of your profile have a cartoony feel to it.

metalspark wrote:Name:Swoop

Function:Bombardier

Alliance:Autobot

Quote:"Fear can hit targets
unreachable by bullets."

Alt.Mode:Pteranodon

Weapon/s:2X Wing mounted missile launchers,Thermal Sword

Height:24 feet

Strength:6
Intelligence:6
Courage:7
Dexterity:7
Speed:8
Endurance:9
Firepower:7
Accuracy:6
Melee:8
Rank:5
Tech Skills:5

Bio:
Swoop is the most affable of the Dinobots and often acts as their liaison to the other Autobots.Even though he's able to get along
with them better than the rest of the Dinobots,he still agrees with
his comrades belief that Optimus Prime is an ineffective leader.
Some Autobots are put off by his fearsome dinosaur mode and his loyalty to his team,both of which disguise's his out-of-place kindness and good natured personality.This secretly makes swoop sad, but this sorrow is outweighed by his dedication to the Dinobot squad and their goals. Swoop has managed to turn his grotesque form into an advantage on the battlefield, where he has become an expert at using his diving attacks and disconcerting battle cries to confuse and scatter his terrified decepticon targets.
Abilities:
Swoop may have above average strength but he is still the weakest Dinobot.In pteranadon mode ho can fly at speeds of 250 miles per hour
for 700 miles at a time.He is a top-notch flyer and his maneuverability is awesome.He has two wing mounted missile launchers
with air-to-air and air-to-ground capabilities. Each missile has a blast force equivalent of 5000lbs.of TNT,and they are accurate at ranges up to 8miles away.He can also use them in robot mode, as well as a thermal sword that heats up to 4000 centigrade and is capable of slicing through most decepticon armour plating.Swoop is highly fuel-efficient.
Weakness:
Swoops wings are quite thin and weakly armored making them susceptible to artillery fire.

Sample Post:
"Grimlock me swoop say we going in wrong direction" said swoop as they patrolled the autobot base"me grimlock say you totally wrong we going right way"as he bashed swoop aside"me slag say we all go this way"roared slag as has walked back to base to relive himself of grimlock and swoop."Swoop say you grimlock bad leader""well me grimlock say you not very nice"as the got ready to have a brawl,"me sludge say shut the frag up"as he tried to stop the fight but instead getting kicked in the skidplate by grimlock.

I'm afraid your grammar and writing skills are just not up to the level we are looking for in the RPG. There are multiple punctuation problems throughout the entire application, not putting a space after periods and quotations marks mostly. Your sample post is nothing but dialogue and action and only partially deals with the character you are applying for. We are not looking for single paragraph posts with little depth. If you can improve your writing skills considerably then you might be able to join. As it is now I'm afraid you just aren't up to the standards we have set.

Name: Ironhide

Allegiance: Autobot

Function: Security

Alt. Mode: Red SUV

Weapons: Laser rifle

Special Abilities: Water Gun (shoots liquid nitrogen, glue, ect.)

Height: 20 ft/5.20 m

Quote: "High tech security is no replacement for guts!"

Strength: 7
Intelligence: 7
Dexterity: 3
Speed: 3
Endurance: 9
Courage: 10
Firepower: 7
Accuracy: 7
Melee: 8
Tech Skill: 4
Charisma: 7
Rank:

Profile: "Go chew on a microchip!" is Ironhide's slogan. Prefers action to words. Bodyguard to Optimus Prime. In charge of guarding anything of importance. Gruff, but kind. Trithyllium-steel skin makes him nearly invulnerable to attack. Shoots variety of liquids from supercooled nitrogen to superheated lead. Has sonar, radar, radiowave detector. Ironhide was built at a time when armor was thick, and circuitry was simple. He is one of the older Autobots, tested in thousands of battles, over countless centuries. He has been injured many times, but never deactivated. For every scratch and scar that he bears he has a tale to tell, and most of the younger Autobots are all too eager to hear them. Gruff, and sometimes grumpy, he is also naturally protective of the other Autobots. He is tough, rough, and nearly impossible to damage.

Abilites: Ironhide is a tough, impossible-to-stop Autobot. He can hit a top speed of 100 mph, and though he isn't the fastest Autobot, he is one of the toughest. His arm can transform into a water gun that shoots liquid nitrogen, glue, and several other sticky or liquid substances. He can use his water gun to great effect. The wall in Shockwave's base hates the weapon -- he's broken in and out of that base many times using it. The water gun has been used to glue Decepticons' feet to the ground, stick Starscream's mouth shut, and at one time hold together a chunk of the Ark that had broken off. He isn't a sharpshooter when it comes down to a sniping mission, but when he gets up close, the Decepticon he is fighting has oil dripping from many cracked joints.

Weaknesses: Perhaps one of Ironhide's only weaknesses is the fact that he's overeager. Whenever he finds out that something wrong, he rushes right in, not taking into account the fact that the situation might be an ambush. If he is ambushed, he often is not able to fight back before he is defeated. Only the fact that he's close friends with Optimus Prime has saved his life time and again. He is also so old that he tends to break down at the worst of times. He has always been saved by Ratchet or Prime, but he hopes that there is never a time when the two aren't around to help.

Sample Post: Ironhide marched down the hallway of the Ark and into the command center. Once again, Ratchet was working on injured Autobots. He shook his head. If he were Ratchet, he wouldn't have the patience to fix everyone.

"Howdy, Ironhide."

That was young Bumblebee, the smallest Autobot. Ironhide looked down at his little buddy. Bumblebee was limping up to Ratchet. Ironhide followed closely.

"Uh, what happened?" Ironhide asked the young Autobot.

"I was...ambushed by Runabout," Bumblebee muttered.

Ironhide punched the wall and fingered the gattling gun hanging loosely on his waist. No one did that to his little buddy! He turned to run out of the base. This was his opportunity to do something! Optimus Prime grabbed his shoulder firmly.

"Calm down, Ironhide," Optimus said gently. "You don't even know where Runabout is."

"I don't care!" Ironhide replied. "I'm going out to find him!"

"Very well." Optimus sighed and released Ironhide's arm. "At least take Bumper and Outback with you, Ironhide."

"Alright," Ironhide mumbled. "Guys, let's roll out!"

Ironhide didn't wait for his two teammates to catch up. He put the pedal to the metal and roared straight into the middle of the desert. He was picking up a faint energy signature. There was a Decepticon nearby. He transformed into his bipedal robot mode. Why did Optimus have to team him up with others, anyway? It was like Optimus didn't respect him, didn't trust him, even! Aw, he'd clear that up later. It was time to get back to the business at hand.

"Alright, Runabout, where are you?" he shouted.

Behind him, Bumper and Outback were getting closer. He pulled out his gattling gun in one hand while transforming his other hand into a water gun and setting it to its liquid nitrogen mode.

"Wait up!" cried Bumper.

Behind a nearby hill, a shadowy form aimed a sniper rifle at Ironhide's head. Just another second, and the old bot would be dead.

"Hurry up!" Ironhide cried.

Before he knew what was happening, there was a loud *BOOM*. The next thing he knew, he was on the ground. oil was leaking out of one eye. It had been an ambush all along. Prime was right...why did he have to be so impatient?

"G-guys...get me b-back...to R-Ratchet...before I..."

He blacked out, and for many long hours, did not wake up. He was tossed into fitful dreams about his past. He remembered his first battle, when he'd met Optimus, and...

"He's been fully repaired," Ratchet said.

Ironhide sat up. He was okay. He knew that he had been wrong. He looked at Optimus.

"I...I'm sorry, sir. Listen, I should've obeyed. Should've waited for the kids. It's just, I've been feelin' useless lately. You know, I'm an older 'bot, and it seems like..."

"Ironhide, you'll never be useless. Now, I think you can return to your quarters and rest."

Ironhide saluted and walked away slowly. At least Prime understood him.

Nemesis Rodimus wrote:Name: Ironhide

Allegiance: Autobot

Function: Security

Alt. Mode: Red SUV

Weapons: Laser rifle

Special Abilities: Water Gun (shoots liquid nitrogen, glue, ect.)

Height: 28 ft/8.53 m

Quote: "High tech security is no replacement for guts!"

Strength: 7
Intelligence: 7
Dexterity: 3
Speed: 3
Endurance: 9
Courage: 10
Firepower: 7
Accuracy: 7
Melee: 8
Tech Skill: 4
Charisma: 7
Rank:

Profile: "Go chew on a microchip!" is Ironhide's slogan. Prefers action to words. Bodyguard to Optimus Prime. In charge of guarding anything of importance. Gruff, but kind. Trithyllium-steel skin makes him nearly invulnerable to attack. Shoots variety of liquids from supercooled nitrogen to superheated lead. Has sonar, radar, radiowave detector. Ironhide was built at a time when armor was thick, and circuitry was simple. He is one of the older Autobots, tested in thousands of battles, over countless centuries. He has been injured many times, but never deactivated. For every scratch and scar that he bears he has a tale to tell, and most of the younger Autobots are all too eager to hear them. Gruff, and sometimes grumpy, he is also naturally protective of the other Autobots. He is tough, rough, and nearly impossible to damage.

Abilites: Ironhide is a tough, impossible-to-stop Autobot. He can hit a top speed of 100 mph, and though he isn't the fastest Autobot, he is one of the toughest. His arm can transform into a water gun that shoots liquid nitrogen, glue, and several other sticky or liquid substances. He can use his water gun to great effect. The wall in Shockwave's base hates the weapon -- he's broken in and out of that base many times using it. The water gun has been used to glue Decepticons' feet to the ground, stick Starscream's mouth shut, and at one time hold together a chunk of the Ark that had broken off. He isn't a sharpshooter when it comes down to a sniping mission, but when he gets up close, the Decepticon he is fighting has oil dripping from many cracked joints.

Weaknesses: Perhaps one of Ironhide's only weaknesses is the fact that he's overeager. Whenever he finds out that something wrong, he rushes right in, not taking into account the fact that the situation might be an ambush. If he is ambushed, he often is not able to fight back before he is defeated. Only the fact that he's close friends with Optimus Prime has saved his life time and again. He is also so old that he tends to break down at the worst of times. He has always been saved by Ratchet or Prime, but he hopes that there is never a time when the two aren't around to help.

Sample Post: Ironhide marched down the hallway of the Ark and into the command center. Once again, Ratchet was working on injured Autobots. He shook his head. If he were Ratchet, he wouldn't have the patience to fix everyone.

"Howdy, Ironhide."

That was young Bumblebee, the smallest Autobot. Ironhide looked down at his little buddy. Bumblebee was limping up to Ratchet. Ironhide followed closely.

"Uh, what happened?" Ironhide asked the young Autobot.

"I was...ambushed by Runabout," Bumblebee muttered.

Ironhide punched the wall and fingered the gattling gun hanging loosely on his waist. No one did that to his little buddy! He turned to run out of the base. This was his opportunity to do something! Optimus Prime grabbed his shoulder firmly.

"Calm down, Ironhide," Optimus said gently. "You don't even know where Runabout is."

"I don't care!" Ironhide replied. "I'm going out to find him!"

"Very well." Optimus sighed and released Ironhide's arm. "At least take Bumper and Outback with you, Ironhide."

"Alright," Ironhide mumbled. "Guys, let's roll out!"

Ironhide didn't wait for his two teammates to catch up. He put the pedal to the metal and roared straight into the middle of the desert. He was picking up a faint energy signature. There was a Decepticon nearby. He transformed into his bipedal robot mode. Why did Optimus have to team him up with others, anyway? It was like Optimus didn't respect him, didn't trust him, even! Aw, he'd clear that up later. It was time to get back to the business at hand.

"Alright, Runabout, where are you?" he shouted.

Behind him, Bumper and Outback were getting closer. He pulled out his gattling gun in one hand while transforming his other hand into a water gun and setting it to its liquid nitrogen mode.

"Wait up!" cried Bumper.

Behind a nearby hill, a shadowy form aimed a sniper rifle at Ironhide's head. Just another second, and the old bot would be dead.

"Hurry up!" Ironhide cried.

Before he knew what was happening, there was a loud *BOOM*. The next thing he knew, he was on the ground. oil was leaking out of one eye. It had been an ambush all along. Prime was right...why did he have to be so impatient?

"G-guys...get me b-back...to R-Ratchet...before I..."

He blacked out, and for many long hours, did not wake up. He was tossed into fitful dreams about his past. He remembered his first battle, when he'd met Optimus, and...

"He's been fully repaired," Ratchet said.

Ironhide sat up. He was okay. He knew that he had been wrong. He looked at Optimus.

"I...I'm sorry, sir. Listen, I should've obeyed. Should've waited for the kids. It's just, I've been feelin' useless lately. You know, I'm an older 'bot, and it seems like..."

"Ironhide, you'll never be useless. Now, I think you can return to your quarters and rest."

Ironhide saluted and walked away slowly. At least Prime understood him.

Approved. Just remember he doesn't have the Gatling gun anymore.

I think I'll try getting an Autobot to go with Swindle:

Hound

Allegiance: Autobot
Function: Field scout
Alt. Mode: Jeep
Weapons: Shoulder-Mounted Missile Launcher, Hologram Gun

Height: 20 ft/6.1 m.
Quote: "Observe everything, remember even more."

Strength: 5
Intellegence: 8
Dexterity: 7
Speed: 5
Endurance: 7
Courage: 10 (in G1 profile)
Firepower: 3
Accuracy: 7
Melee: 4
Tech Skill: 9
Charisma: 6
Rank: (6 in G1 profile)

Profile: Hound is right as home on Earth: The vast and varied terrain of this planet is much more appealling to him than the metallic city-blocks of Cybertron. Hound might even say that he prefers this new hom to his original one. Hound has no problems spending long stretches scouting the planet for Decepticons, as it gives him ample time to explore the planet, and use his holomatter avatar to interact with the native lifeforms. Secretly, Hound harbors a fantasy of actually becoming one of the humans and living an organic life, away from the endless wars of the Cybertronian, but he is a loyal warrior, and would never actually desert the Autobot cause: Certainly not while the Earth is threatened by the Decepticons.

Abilities: Hounds function as a scout gives him access to a wide range of advanced sensors, mounted as a gun-like device on the back of his Alt mode. These act both as a long-range radar and a sensitive infrared radiation collector, allowing him to organic lifeforms and Cybertronians, hidden or disguised, as susbstantial range. His main 'weapon' is a hologram gun, which can project 3-dimensional holograms over a wide area, based on thousands of 3d images stored in Hounds databanks from his scouting mission. This allows him to not only confuse the enemy with false targets, but to 'cloak' himself and his allies under a false image, a very useful tactic on an unpredictable battlefield.

Weaknesses: Hounds sensors can sometimes be too sensitive: Even a small level of electromagnetic or thermal interference can reduce their effectiveness substantially, leaving him reduced to his optics like every other Autobot. Also, the power requirements of his sensors and hologram gun mean that he is rather poorly armed for an Autobot who must work alone: His only real ranged armament is a shoulder-mounted missile launcher, with average punch and limited ammo.

Sample Post: "Well, sir, you look like you're makin' a big trip. Are ya lookin' for anything in particular?"

Hounds holomatter avatar looked around at the camping store owner. He hadn't really expected to have to interact with the residents of this city, he'd just stopped to examine the unusual readings coming from the large building across the street. Still, I could always use the practise.

"Oh, I don't know. I was...browsing, that's the word." The avatar pointed out the window to Hound himself, looking a little out of place, a jeep with various odd-looking equipment attached to the trunk in a fairly urbane area. "I just got my new All-Terrain Vehicle, and I'm in the mood to take it out into the wilds, you know, see Mother Nature. And I'm thinking I may need some additional equipment, you know, to be properly equipped for such a trip."

Hound could tell from the store-owner's expression that the human was bemused by the avatar's excuse. He then began to show the avatar some of his wares, the ones with the higher monetary requirements, but Hound's attention was elsewhere.

A human was walking out of the large building across the street....or at elast it appeared to be a human. The thermal signature is all wrong. It's not human at all....it's Decepticon! Hound looked at the signs around the building again: It appeared to be some form of research lab, dealing with energy sources. Typical...

"Er, well, that is an awful lot to take in, er, sir.", the avatar said, interrupting the shopkeeper in his pitch. "You know, I think I'll have to, to rethink this trip. It's a lot more complex than I thought if I have to purchase all the things you suggested." With that, the avatar half-ran out of the store and got into Hound. The Autobot scout realised he had been very rude, but with the human-like replica leaving in a white sports car, he didn't have time for tact.

I'll trail him at range until he gets out of the city...then in the rural terrain, thats were I can really show my stuff.